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We've all made them.
And they have some angsty terrible past.

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Okay I don’t have a better image of her since I haven’t drawn her in like…. seven years.

This is my first OC, and at the time I made her she was literally a self-insert. She even had my name, Melinda (though I can’t remember her last name)

She was from a universe called “Portalworlds” which was an “”original”” verse made by like every fictional universe that currently existed connected by this weird space-like void. They were all connected by portals and there was one superportal that connected it to a nega-version of it.
Melinda (I renamed her Malynda to make it seem less like me) was the guardian of this place and she could fly and create energy fields and portals and knew tae kwon do and was all super goody two-shoes. She had an archrival (can’t remember much about her) who was typical evil and represented by dark blue and a dragonfly (Melinda was represented by purple and a butterfly) and had pretty much the same powers and guarded the evil portalworld.

They each had the goal of protecting their respective domains from intermixing and causing problems (which in hindsight means they should have been working together)

Melinda was also the girlfriend to Danny Phantom (who I later “redesigned” into another OC) and had other friends.

But it was basically a giant crossover and I was in charge of protecting it.

My lords and ladies, today I present to you a choice specimen. This OC is from Fire Emblem PoR/RD (though she probably was initally made for Smash Bros. instead), and has appeared on other MS blogs prior to this, resulting in a shitstorm and (though begrudgingly) a reform. Now, if said reform made her less of a Mary Sue she wouldn’t be here, but here we are anyway.

You don’t need to have any prior understanding to this series, other than it’s a turn-by-turn based strategy game, and characters come in the form of classes that conform to uniform designs and standard weapon counts/movements within a turn. With the sole exception of final bosses and the main protagonist, everyone is seemingly normal and are statistically balanced. The challenge in each of the games is to make the best out of your soldiers (dubbed as units) and bring down your enemies through strategy. Unless you’re playing on lower levels, it’s impossible for one-man-armies to exist. Your enemies are often as strong as you are, and going alone is suicide…

…But that doesn’t seem to be so, not with this Sue, who stylizes herself as the ‘Queen of the Swords’, despite not being of royal blood. Often she is depicted cutting down mountains of bodies with no explanation of whom or where they came from, or for her reason to do so, save to show off the fact she’s extremely, superbly strong. Do note that these are open starters for others to reply to, and her dialogues are either her boasting her strength, or looking down on the already-existing Crimean Queen Elincia, despite the latter being canonly one of the best rulers Tellius has ever seen. Akane’s reason for disrespecting Elincia (e.g., by not referring to her by a title despite not belonging to any other social status herself, seeing that her own ‘queenly’ title is all but name) is based on being raised knowing that royals are served everything they want. That excuse can fly for only so long, since Elincia canonly fights and bleeds alongside them, amongst other respect-worthy feats throughout the story. Akane has quoted to ‘have done more than any royal can ever do’, despite her story lacking any elements to top Elincia, save for her pre-established mastery with the sword, and still disrespects the Crimean Queen all the same in her interactions. Hey, we all can’t be caught with the same title, eh? Because having same titles are totally like getting caught in a party with the same dress. Eew.

As all Mary Sues, they completely miss the point of the whole series and in this case, Akane places herself within her universe as even more popular than the main character (also her pet squeeze), Ike, himself by being so well-known the masses call her a ‘queen’, while Ike is merely known as ‘The Hero of Blue Flames’. Mind you, that only happened after two whole fucking games’ worth of achievements. 

This RP OC’s posts that contain nothing other than sneering at other canon characters for being perpetually inferior to her standing, or to /kill off said canon characters with little to no provocation. A favourite of hers to torment and terrorize is FE: Awakening’s Lucina. Yes, Lucina, only because she simply looks like Akane, swings a holy sword and is a genuine female sword-wielding royal. (You can imagine the burn when Lucina got confirmed for Smash. Haha.) Then there’s also her being snappy at Soren, probably because he’s the closest person to Ike in canon. She’ll hang onto the excuse that her character was possessed by a dark Goddess who compells the darkness inside of her to rise, and to go on murderous rampages. Surprisingly enough, very little RP partners actually stick through those threads, because the only option is to be dramatically killed, mary-sue style.

Oh, and she does a large share of bragging that Main Protag-Mercenary Ike is her one and true love, through ways of shippy art, and porn. There’s virtually nothing wrong with any canon/oc pairing, unless it 1) Doesn’t make sense and is OOC, 2) the art is traced.

Unfortunately, Akane qualifies as both.

Ike, the main character, is a dense brick who is about 700% focused on fighting for his friends. Plus, I doubt someone who views everyone as equals despite racial or national standing would fall in love with an arrogant, self-obsessed swordswoman who took on the title as ‘Queen’ all because that’s apparently ‘what other people named her’, and that ‘she deserved it more than Elincia did’. A good canon Ike would either a) friendzone the shit out of this cray lady or b) focus on the Goddamn war he’s fighting.

You can also tell that some of her work definitely traced off Visual Novels or lame shit hentai (nsfw tags), by looking at how drastically inconsistent her art is. Taking into consideration that all this art was made within a span of 2-3 months, there’s more than enough evidence to prove that her art has been heavily traced.

Comparing figures A to E, we have the almighty sword queen piercing the hearts of her people with her expandable ass size. If anyone questions the obvious, always say that it’s the mun playing around with size variation; we all need our fun, no matter how illogical or unrealistic.

Of course, we can’t leave a sue in the dirt and constantly poke holes at her, can we? We need to give a bit of help for the creator to fix this legendary train wreck of an original character, else we’ll just be branded as haters like the many other people who have tried to fix this OC. For agreeing to this, you’ll be branded as a hater, too, and there will be a fuckload of anons praising the Queen and claiming that they’ll bow to her wwwwww what the fuck is that shit

Say we’d let Akane retain her unparalelled strength to continuously slay innocents with her glowing sword that’s totally not blessed by Tellius’ Goddess (because that’s solely reserved for important characters only), then that illogical body (that has birthed two children) has to change up.

As far as I know, there’s only one character who has done a mountain’s worth of slaughter by his own hand, and it’s this guy right here.

This Red Lobster reject is strong enough to completely wipe out a nation’s elite forces by his lonefuckingsome, and let’s say Akane is about twice as more skilled as he is, because Walhart there could only manage one while the glorious queen could do two.

She needs to have his physique, won’t you agree?

There, all fixed… Physically, that is. We’ve yet to touch her background, whatever it was, because the blog itself is too cringeworthy to explore. I’ll leave that to anyone to fix, along with her art to gloriously redline.

To be honest, several people have tried to fix her character, and nothing could be done without an insane level of sacrifices. So, what do you think, my good ladies and gentlemen? Can you save this sue, or should we toss her down into the pit of shame?

P.s., RP-wise, this character is literally on to bang or outdo anything canon. Anything. She went so far as to bang Bowser once.

Yes, this Bowser; I wish I was joking, but she did. 

There’s this guy on recolor.me…

Here is his oc and what he says on his oc when he’s not harassing random females for nudes and sexual imagery:

UGHHHHHHHH

Is that ‘The Admirable/The Adorable Princess’, herself!?

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(No really, that’s what her first two names actually mean when together, I found out. ‘Miranda’ means Worthy of Admiration and ‘Creusa’ means Princess, actually.)

In terms of personality, she’s the prettiest one in more ways than one.

I’d reveal more about her in terms of personality-based backgrounds and name meanings, but I’m not sure if you’d rather save them for the PMs/fan-mail or hear me list more.

If that lady really is who I think she is, she feels so pretty.

Either Ruby Red or Amethyst would be the ‘default’ colors of her eyes, sure she can change them at will but those are the usual colors she’d wake up to, in fact.

I am happy to stare, either way because it feels like it’s based on a picture of her that was taken. Where’s that ‘blush’ smile when you wanna use one in this site!?

She’s Loving, Committed, Self-Confident, Playful, Trustworthy, Empathetic, Open-Minded, Imaginative, Powerful and generally Self-Reliant.

Might I do well as to add more, by all means?

Yes, I dare add more, because she often has Doves and Sparrows flocking towards her, usually Turtledoves when Doves appear. She also works to check out whenever there be flaws in any kind of relationship she’d know of, and see if they can be repaired in fact for good measure.

I daresay that if she senses Romantic Affections at work between two or more people, regardless of Gender or Orientations, she’s gonna find some way or another to work it out tastefully no matter the endgame verdict for that matter.

Alright, let’s play ‘remember your old sues and suffer’. Best game, I know.

Years ago, in a galaxy far far away, I was into one specific anime; Sailor moon.

I started out with a cutesy thing where my OC was “Sailor Star” or “Sailor Pink Star” since I don’t remember which one. I’m going with Star since it seems the less-sue option. In weeaboo!me’s defense, I didn’t know about Star Fighter and them since I only had watched the English episodes. She was based off of me with brown hair and blue eyes, and was a transfer student from America who ended up meeting Serena and went to her home and ended up teased by her little bro. Then they went for ice cream and oh no someone’s attacking and Luna magically appeared and suddenly magical girl. She could send stars as attacks, and was one of the strongest scouts but not stronger than Serena.

Another sailor sue I had, I don’t remember her name so I’m gonna call her Sailor Dark. Anyway, her job was apparently to kidnap Darien since for some odd reason, she was kidnapped and turned into a dark scout or whatever. She would fake like she was returning to normal and grab Darien when he ran over to check on her.

I will never stop…

Here’s my Five Nights At Freddy’s Oc: Robin the Scarlet Macaw.
Robin is a large Macaw and about Bonnie’s weight.he has blue and yellow wings on his arm.Robin has a very long tail with a sharp tip at the end.
Before the bite of 87: he used to say what the children says to him in a funny high pitch voice.he also dance when the band plays in a funny way and that makes the kids dance along with him.
When the bite happened: Robin was turned off and ripped apart.his remains were in the backstage around the place but he was turn on and put back together by Bonnie,Chica,Foxy and Freddy.they also shoved a 18 year old boy into him.
What he does during the night watch: it’s unknown where he is because you can’t see him for awhile but he is there but his shadow.you can see him after looking in the cameras for 3 times.he will appear in the dinning room,looking away from the player in a pose like he was about to fly off but the second time his head will turn to the camera like a owl.he’ll been standing in the middle of the right.but he doesn’t go to the window or door but his shadow will been seen if you turn on the light.he attacks like Bonnie and Chica but in the same way instead he’ll be above the player and screams and kills the player but he doesn’t do the “Bwaah!” Noise.he does a high and demonic squawk.
Abilities: his tail is so long and he stabs the player’s chest and sometimes you can see his tail is the restrooms.
Squawking: he squawks instead of “bwah!” You can hear his soft,slow squawks near you’re right door that means he’s there.
He was created by a 32 year old man named Robin Skyes (he was named after his creator) he loved bird and his favourite was Scarlet Macaws,so Robin the Scarlet Macaw.but he was killed 6 weeks later,so he doesn’t know what Robin become.
Robin (like Foxy) is most active when the cameras were off.

As promised…I will bring you bad FNaF sues. You’re welcome.

Name: Dotty Dalmation
Gender: Female
Occupation: Solo singer.
Items: Her Bow and Dress.

I’m 99% sure they don’t really have occupations…

Backstory: 
Dotty was purchased from a builder that had no use for her anymore, putting her up for sale on Ebay in new condition, she was then put to work at the pizzeria soon enough, doing a small solo act for all of the guests there, however, one day during performance, there was a malfunction in her system, causing her to fall off of the stage, breaking her arm off in the process. The owner didn’t have the heart to throw her away and instead kept her in the back so she could stay with the other animatronics, though for a long time, the door was accidentally locked from the outside, making her dress start to rot around the bottom, Dotty tried to break open the door with a pipe she found, but lost her eye when she made the attempt. After being locked in for a week, she was rescued by Foxy, the animatronic from Pirate’s Cove, she had never truly met Foxy in person, but she always had, they bonded quickly and became friends, Dotty starting to develop a slight tomboy attitude from him. She is slight friends with the other cast members, but she spends most of her time with Foxy, keeping hidden in Pirate’s Cove after hours.

Run ons much? Like oh my gosh I could correct this with periods to make it all right. Anyways, buying animatronics on ebay is…a stretch. This just doesn’t make a lot of sense. Like, if she was hella broken they would have at LEAST taken her apart.

Path: Storage, Eating Area, Stage, Pirates Cove, West Hallway, Office.

Idk if her path is similar to the others but…the only one who should be in pirates cove is Foxy. Justtttt sayin.

Attack signs:

-Hearing “shoes” on the floor are her claws, she is moving to her next area.

-Hearing sobbing from somewhere, she is in the storage room.

-Hearing a soft song being sung, she is on the Stage.

-Late at night she will be in front of the camera in the Eating area.

-Hearing a growl or a whimper, she is in Pirate’s Cove.

-Hearing sparks, she is in the West hallway.

-Hearing a panting noise, she is at the door.

What?

Facts:

She was made in Canada and she was originally entered in a robot building competition.

I give up. So done…

Well, I haven’t played the game myself but I did see a few clips of some gameplays of it. (Didn’t watch the whole videos though, too freaky… >w`<; ) But I do like the fan art being made of the animatronics~ X3 So inspired, I decided to create a character of my own with my SAI magic. But instead of an animal, my character is a doll, which makes it more creepier…~ :plotting: Her name is ‘Baby-Doll.’
Full Name: ’Baby-Doll’ (Jade)


Alias: The Doll


Occupation: Animatronic Children’s Entertainer/Singer


Powers/Skills: Can quickly rotate her head 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise to view what’s behind her. Able to distract her victims with a disturbing melody to give fellow animatronics the chance to strike.


Hobby: Entertaining children/singing


BIO: ’Baby-Doll’ was once a normal human, a young adult named Jade who lived with her uncle. Despite losing her loving parents when she was fourteen, Jade had no trouble making friends. She first heard about Freddy Fazbear’s Pizza when reading an old article about the horrific event in 1987, when a customer was severely injured by one of the mascots. A week later, Jade was then invited to a friend’s child’s birthday party at the same place, finding it quite quaint but secretly creepy. 
One night however, a few of Jade’s closest friends decided to explore the restaurant after dark as a dare, and persuaded Jade to tag along. The dare backfired, unfortunately as they were all locked in and eventually, encountered by the animatronics during the late hours of the night. Witnessing her friends being brutally murdered one by one, Jade was the last to remain as she begged for mercy in song (mainly singing to calm her nerves. Singing was a hobby of Jade’s as well as baking) Intrigued by her sweet voice (especially Freddy) and sensing she had suffered enough, the animatronics offered Jade a deal - to become one of them. Work for them, and promise to remain at Freddy’s forever and her life will be spared. Jade hesitatingly agrees, giving her word and disappears with the antimatronics to ‘embrace’ her fate.
Jade was never found or seen again, along with the bodies of her friends. But the very next day, after their disappearance, there was a new addition the restaurant’s mascots - a petite animatronic doll with a frilly apron (a symbolization that she loved to cook and bake) which possesses a striking resemblance to the missing Jade. The name ‘Baby-Doll’ was given to her, due to her ‘charming’ appearance. The doll can be found on stage, singing with the other mascots or sometimes solo, which is very enchanting. How she came to be will never be known…and sometimes at night, an eery melody can be heard, drifting through the restaurant…a sharp head turning 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise…grinning in the dark as a fatal distraction…~ :evillaugh:

If you don’t know who Akai is, she’s kinda like a milder, female version of Chris Chan. She made an FC X Canon paring called Sonai, and I will compare it to my own FC x Canon pairing, PikaLayton.
Layton stays in character. Sonic does not.
Pikachu isn’t a weak Mary Sue, but she can be powerful. Akai is a Victim Sue (the one that makes you feel bad foe them on purpose) and overpowered.
Most of my PikaLayton drawings are romantic, mostly kissing and holding hands. Sonai is just sexual things.
Layton likes Pikachu because she has helped him a lot, and because she can make him feel happy. “Sonic” merely likes Akai for her body.

if any of the Akai fans come here because you think I’m bullying her, think about what I’m saying. OC/FC x Canon is acceptable, but try to make sure the characters stay in character…

Akai does not belong to me.

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But,it’s not in character for Layton to fall for a pikachu.  It’s bestiality 

Okay so, this person here has A LOT OF GOD CHARACTERS AND SHIT AND ITS FUCKING ANNOYING.

the 1st ones name is Kitty, she is a god ???? and HAS HER OWN RELIGION AND HAS A SHITLOAD OF FOLLOWERS, NOBODY CAN KILL HER ( OR ANOTHER ONE OF THEIR OCS NAMED DEAN ) OR THEIR CHARACTER WILL BE EXECUTED ???? And they also have a bunch of fucking powers like they can get set on fire without dying and can teleport people and mind control them and shit. 

and the 2nd one. His name is Mr.Meowsers ( what the fuck kind of name is that ) and he can apparently turn into a human and he kills everyone ????? like all of the other gods and shit ???????? even though the gods in the first place couldn’t be killed but SOMEHOW HE DID IT????? He can also mind control others like Kitty can.

and the 3rd ones name is Jimmy, a fucking caterpillar.

Just 

Why.

Apparently he can also turn into a human and when hes in his caterpillar form he can grow arms and shit like that. He also has the same fucking mind control powers which. Why would you mind control others in the first place? They should be able to control their own fucking characters, but no. You gotta be a fucking take control of them and can make them do whatever. Why.

and the 4th one is a fucking centipede demon thing I don’t even know how to spell his fucking name.

He can apparently kill things to without dying and just

What. The fuck ? ?? ?

( She ALSO SHIPS SOME OF HER OTHER CHARACTERS WITH CANON CHARACTERS FROM THE GAME “OFF” )

(Tigger warning: rape)

Found a NiGHTS sue. This thing is irritating.

So far, the suethor has a 10 chapter fanfic about her OC. But because it’s TEN chapters, I think that doing a Let’s Read of the whole thing would be too much. So instead, I decided that it would be better if I were to just describe to the best of my ability the sue’s backstory, with all information being taken from what I’ve read in the fic. I will also occasionally take snippets from said fic to aid in my description. This will be Part 1 of my description, so let’s get to it!

First thing’s first, I’ll start with the basics. The sue was originally a human named Dialla Ramsey. She’s apparently a 16 year old girl who is 5.2 and 107 lbs. (I was a little curious about those measurements. Correct me if I’m wrong, but based on what I’ve researched, this sue is seriously leaning towards being underweight!). However, the suethor just hand waves it as her being “small for her age”.

She also has the whole tragic backstory thing. Her mother cheated on her father and he left as a result. Surprise surprise, the father was also the stereotypical “good and kind parent” who believed in the sue’s crazy whimsical little fantasies about seeing NiGHTS related things in real life and he’s the only one who was ever kind to her and understood her and blah blah blah, you get the picture. The mother is the stereotypical “mean and evil parent”:

She ran a hand through her dark pink hair, wishing she had inherited her father’s royal blue. She had asked her mom into dying it that color but the woman wouldn’t have it.

"I don’t want to look at you and be reminded of him!" Her mother would say, then would always add with a bitter voice. "You act like him enough as it is."

To which Dialla would retort in her mind. ‘As apposed to being be a trollop like you, that can’t hold a relationship for more than a month? No thank you!’ But of course she would never says this out loud. She couldn’t stand to be slapped again. A punch was one thing but slaps just stung and were humiliating.

UUUGGHHH IT’S SO MELODRAMATIC JUST STOP

So the mother is neglectful, abusive, and brings home strange men. This is also another part of the sue’s tragic past, as the man that the sue’s mom is with in particular, Stan, is apparently a big creeper towards Dialla and attempts to rape her at one point. She gets away, locks herself in her room, tries to call the police, drops the phone, AND THEN PROCCEDS TO JUST SIT DOWN AND DRAW HER FIREND’S NiGHTS OC LIKE NOTHING HAPPENED. It never affects her, NOT ONCE, throughout the rest of the fucking story and it is never mentioned again.

The sue’s school life is also annoyingly cliché. She has two friends that are literally walking anime stereotypes, Polly (the “perky and kawaii bubbly girl who’s all about fashion and is rich!!”) and Kitty (the “rebel, goth girl who’s emotionless and tells off the stupid preps!!”). And of course, what sue sob story would be complete without the generic bully preps! :

"Yeah, Dialla, where’s the dumpster you dug that outfit out of." A nasally voice chimed in. Standing there in all her puffed up vanity was Gigi Windsor and her posy giggling like morons. One of the followers stepped forward and without warning, tugged at Dialla’s magenta locks with her hand. "Look at this! Such a bold color!" She cried.

Gigi sniffed and turned her nose up. “Cici, don’t touch garbage, who knows where its been.” She flipped her dyed blonde locks.

Cici let go like she had touched poo. “Eeeew! Now I like have to wash my hands!” she wined and her twin sister Mimi consoled her.

Gigi stepped up and glared down at Dialla, she had a few inches on the other girl. “It’s bad enough to exist when no one wants you, your daddy left for a reason. Get a clue.” She smirked as Dialla’s eyes got wide and started to water, but wasn’t counting on the girl she had picked on for so long to grow a backbone.

The pink haired girl bristled and shoved Gigi away from her as hard as she could, causing the bully to fall back on her butt. “Don’t you dare talk bad about my dad, you… you… whore!” Living alone with her mother gave Dialla the special slut-detector.

Gigi’s eyes flared and she got to her feet then swung her hand. Her manicured nails were out for blood.

YAY WAY TO SLUT SHAME WOMEN WHO DRESS GIRLY SUETHOR

Mini rant here, I can’t STAND it when suethors do this. It’s petty, it’s snobby, and it doesn’t make us like your OC any better. Get over yourself.

Ahem, ANYWAY, so it turns out that the sue and both her friends are all NiGHTS fangirls, particularly the sue herself (remember this fact):

"By the way," Polly decided to change the subject and take their minds off the unpleasantness of high school. "I finally got the last issue!" Polly cried excitedly, taking a comic book out of her pack and then shoving it in Dialla’s face. "Sorry, I’m just so psyched that I have the complete set!"

"S’okay. Let me see!" Dialla, grateful for the change of topics, took the thin paperback out of her squealing friend’s hands. "Oh my gosh! This is it! Nights into Dreams 6th issue!" she exclaimed flipping madly through the comic, squealing and blushing at every part that showed a picture of Nights.

Yeah. The sue’s “admiration” gets progressively creepier:

Dialla was staring out the window at the clouds, daydreaming. She took pride in her ability to daydream. Unlike her night dreams which haven’t changed and where she lacks control, she was in her element. Sometimes it became so intense that she couldn’t see anything even though her eyes were open, she would fly, run, jump; but her body stayed still in her seat.

In this particular moment she was daydreaming about NiGHTS of course and she was flying with him through the clouds, laughing and smiling at each other. Suddenly, the nightmaren was in front of her. His marble blue eyes sparkled with love and untold secrets. She smiled back. Their faces drew closer and closer, he closed his eyes and she did the same.

Their lips-

Tap.

Dialla’s eyes snapped open when something hit her temple and she looked down to see a tiny pink paper airplane on her desk. Stupid Polly.

Unwrapping the paper she read the sparklely blue ink. ‘Dreaming about a certain purple horned cutie?’ she glanced at the sender and gave a sheepish grin that made Polly giggle. The blonde went back to taking notes in her pink fuzzy notebook.

Unbeknown to Dialla, Kitty was staring at her from her desk behind her. The bluenette’s eyes narrowed and she forced herself to look back at her sketchbook, where love poems written to NiGHTS took the place of math notes.

And creepier:

She sighed looking at another picture on her desk; it was a picture of herself and Nights together. She was so pathetic. Not only was she a die hard fan of a game hardly anyone plays, she actually dreams of him coming for her and rescuing her from this place.

Why she put so much faith in this imaginary being was simply because she loved him. Correction, she was madly in love with the purple jester… head over heels, couldn’t stop thinking about him, in love. She loved his care-free personality, how no matter how dire everything got he could still bring her joy. She wished on countless stars for him to come alive and be her boyfriend… maybe more. Yet no matter how hard she wished, it never came true.

And creepier:

She slammed the door shut and locked all seven locks then dead-bolted the door, and then shoved her dresser in front of the door. Once the barricade was up, she dove under the bed and sobbed, her fingers shook as she tried to punch in 9-1-1, but she dropped the phone when her door knob rattled and Stan pounded on the door, screaming at her and calling her all kinds of things.

Dialla moved back further under the bed, squeezing her eyes shut and attempted to day dream him gone. She daydreamed that NiGHTS came through her window and flew her out to safety, whispering that it was going to be alright, chanting her name over and over.

This chick’s crazy!!! Seriously, there’s liking a character and then there’s flat out obsession! If it’s affecting her so much that it’s also affecting her life, I think it’s time for a major reality check!

Anyway, the sue falls asleep, ends up in Nightmare, and gets saved by Reala. He takes her to Wizeman where he turns her into the above pic: a half human, half Nightmaren replacement for NiGHTS (who they also never stop comparing her to by the way) named DAiZ (yeah, DAiZ, so original). When asked for an explanation as to why her of all people, we get this:

"You will replace the one who betrayed me."

NiGHTS. “B-but why me?

"I have my reasons. From now on, your name is DAiZ."

BECAUSE REASONS. The suethor’s explanation for DAiZ being chosen is literally BECAUSE REASONS. Keep in mind that this also is never brought up again or questioned, she just accepts it. This sue is not only crazy, she’s also an idiot.

After she blindly just accepts her new enslavement, she walks around with Reala and gets to know him (this is told instead of shown mind you). He is completely OOC and is polite and courteous to her and even tells her of his super-secret plan to overthrow Wizeman (whom he is completely loyal to in the games) at some point and take over for himself. He just tells her this, like it’s no big deal! Also, remember all of that obsessive fangirling over NiGHTS that she did? How she went on and on about how he’s her ideal boyfriend? COMPLETELY FORGOTTEN, she just moves on to Reala:

Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy!

He’s kinda cute.

DAiZ shook her head, “Where did that come from?! Cute? He’s scary!

But a good scary. Her mind argued.

He gives me the creeps. She shot back.

Creeps? Or something more along the lines of nosebleeds? Her mind purred, if minds could even purr.

Gross… He looks like the lead mime from a circus slasher flick.

But a cute mime-

"Ahhh! SHUT UP!" She screamed.

Greeeaaaattt, a badly-written love triangle, that’s just what this story needs. The next three chapters after this is just useless filler dedicated to showing how happy the sue is now that’s she’s been kidnapped and becoming friends with practically all of the bosses in the entire game like they’re one big happy family or something. She’s also stated to be training throughout this period, which could be a great way to show her getting over a conflict that she is said to have at the beginning of her enslavement (she can’t fly), but it’s never gone into detail and is just once again told instead of shown. We never once see her make an attempt to try and fly, we’re just told that she’s been trying.

Whew! And that concludes Part 1 of my summary! I’ll get Part 2 uploaded once I’m done with it (Only one more chapter of horror left!).

Hope you enjoyed!

alright so…

recently, someone i watch on deviantART has been posting a comic involving canon characters, and her own OC, which is fine… except for the way she has her character.

to start off, this is a professor layton OC who’s name is wolf. yes. wolf. 

and of course, like all good sues, she has a thing going on with descole. she is apparently (because of this comic) now his ‘partner’ as in partner in crime. she was his apprentice, like luke is to the professor, but more of crime stuff.

you know what descole has? wolves. so why not name her wolf, because i dunno that makes perfect sense

anyway, she’s pretty annoying and her creator had her name as ‘erin’ something and also ‘alana’ and i am so confused on what her real name is.

also, before i actually get into my point about why she is a giant sue, i would also like to mention that the descole x wolf shipping is hinted at almost all the time, and wolf (like all the descole x oc sues) is only around 18-early 20s while descole (albeit he doesn’t look it) is early forties.

into what the problems.

in her most recent comic, wolf and descole and the butler (i think his name was raymond but i dont remember off the top of my head so i’ll just call him butler) are pretty like ‘let’s go after bronev’. the one character that everyone hated because HE HAS TOUCHED OUR PRECIOUS DESCOLE SO HE MUST PARISH

and of course, bronev is like ‘ayyyy’ and huge fight. wolf pretty much went ‘screw this’ and ran after bronev, and after descole and raymond move their slow asses to go get her, she’s been beat up by bronev. THIS is where the problems come in. (also would like to say, i would provide visuals but im posting this from my laptop which can’t really do much, but it’s actually decent art and it’s okay but the story went south.) bronev has a sword (he is not one of the only men in the series that uses a sword, by the way) and commence sword fight with descole, when bronev could have easier shot him and the butler, and wolf but no we must let them live. long story short, descole almost dies when wolf valiently sacrifices herself to save him and actually almost dies doing so

like this hasn’t happened plenty of times before with other sues

and then descoles pretty much going to try and avenge her death when, WHOOP-DE-DOO SHE’S NOT DEAD

WHO WOULD HAVE GUESSED IT

also would like to mention the fact that she got cut in the abdomen with a sword. a SWORD. and she lived through it.

so p much the butler’s like “shes alive” and they escape and a week later she wakes up and descole going in to see her and he was actually the reason she woke up bc of that one tear, and there’s the fact she’s not wearing a hospital gown because no, we must have bandaged boobs. hospitals gowns mean no fanservice. we can’t have that.

and she almost kisses him until the freaking butler shows up and thank god because too much pedophilia.

my question is

how did she live through all of this especially a freaking SWORD

WHY DID BRONEV NOT KILL THEM WHEN HE HAD THE CHANCE

WHY DOES WOLF NOT HAVE A ‘DRIP’ (idk what it’s actually called) OR HOSPITAL GOWN OR ANYTHING ACCURATE TO BEING IN A HOSPITAL

so many unanswered questions and so many comments like

"im so happy she lived" "why didnt descole kill bronev for wolf" and stuff

ugh

this is a self-submit that i cant believe i didnt submit earlier

the character isnt really a fan character of any kind (though she did change whenever i joined a new fandom and/or got new clothes lmao) and is pretty much just a giant sue 

the text at the bottom thats cut off says “at first glance” btw

jesus christ this used to be my persona

let’s make a check-list shall we

  • werepire
  • demon
  • shinigami
  • shape-shifter (her cat hat changes animals to whatever she wants and she gains some phsyical resemblance to said animal so thats why she has cat ears/tail with the cat hat??? christ)
  • able to harness electricity
  • able to harness dark electricity?? whatever that is

apparently the amazing reasoning behind why this character had all these powers and abilities is b/c a wolf goddess was playing tricks on her and caused all of that to happen?????

the original story was that she was just a normal orphan girl whose parents died on a trip to paris in a plane accident and she lived alone in a cabin in the woods and just drew all day and surfed the internet i guess??  but she was also part of this teen organization that fought crime and hunted down murderers and i dont understand anymore

anyway she had this wish journal right.  she wrote in it one day that she wished her characters would come to life b/c she was lonely and she also wished she was a werepire for SOME REASON

this wolf appeared in her yard and she followed it ??? and she came to a meadow where the wolf disappeared and one of her characters was in the field and was like “hey” and then she went home and all her other characters were there suddenly and shes like holy shit

the rest of the story is weird b/c this dude apparently cloned one of her characters b/c he wanted a son and he died and the clone turned evil and cloned all her characters to make this clone army and the whole story was just so elaborate and i cant believe i put so much time into it /i literally wrote a novel revolving around this character/

not to mention this character was practically a self-insert of me into my own fictional world (no canon characters in there, just…hundreds of ocs that all lived in the same house) and she changed whenever i did?? shes not my persona anymore and thank god i dont draw like that anymore too but shes still an oc of mine that im very fond of (and ive taken away almost all of those abilities and reverted her back to her original abilities which was just shapeshifting to go with the story OTL her gender’s even changed too)

i think the worst part (besides the top-heavy werewolf form and the unbelievable amount of shit to go with her) was the description on dA:

GOOOOOGGGGG this took FOREVUURRRR…

…and it’s SO HUGE. >:U

Eh.

This is a reference for my persona, Nat Vladimira. I hope she’s not forgotten already. X’D

l’I

… Anyway…

The words cut off at the bottom say “first glance.” Not very much else to say here.

The cat form she has is just a general animal form. For all her forms, the markings and accessories are the same.

BEFORE YOU SAY ANYTHING, the reason she has all this crap to do with her species and attributes is due to the fact that a wolf goddess was messing with her and gave her the powers/abilities/traits. This caame from an attempted novel that I am currently -attempting- to rewrite. 

So… Ja…”

im so sorry you had to read that

so in summary nat vladimira was a terrible terrible sue but ive made her better and i still love her to death even with that terrible terrible history o/ glad i could share her with u

SnK OC - Ivan Schneider

Remember that atrocity Lena Schneider? Well this is her brother, and boy oh boy, it’s just as bad as the other one, if not worse. As usual, my comments are in bold.

Birthday
22nd July

Nationality
German-Russian

Personality
Humanity’s laziest. First procrastinator, couch potato and biggest baby in Scouting Legion. He hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him. Noisy and annoying, likes to be in centre of everything. Stupid pranks and rude comments are Ivan’s trademarks. On the other hand he is very charismatic and great at leading people; natural born commander. I’m calling bullshit, and let me tell you why. Because nobody is going to follow a lazy person into combat. Nobody. And no, you cannot just go from being the laziest, couch potato who procrastinates doing things he doesn’t want to do to being a charismatic, natural born commander. This doesn’t work. You said it yourself, he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, and in order to be a Commander you need to be mature and be able to show other people that you are worth following. Sorry, this just doesn’t work.
When working, Ivan likes to work with people - he hates being alone. Usually doing some physical trainings or other activities since he can’t stand “brain-thingies”. Who even wants to work with him when he’s rude and pulls pranks on people? Who even takes him seriously when he’s lazy and a big baby? Ivan can be also grumpy and sad, but it’s a really rare event for the man. Then why even put this in here when it’s a rare thing? You’re only supposed to put relevant information on the character sheet.

Okay, let me break this down for those of you folks who aren’t going to survive until the very end. He is Humanity’s Laziest, yet all his stats – except for his intelligence – are at 9s and 10s. This is Humanity’s Laziest. He also wants to be the next Commander of the Scouting Legion, yet the author states that “he hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him”. Tell me something, how is joining the Scouting Legion and becoming Commander going to profit you at all? It’s full of danger and hard work, all the things Ivan hates. And he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, correct? Why even go into the Scouting Legion if you don’t like hard work and are a big baby? Why not go into the Garrison?

 Background
Ivan is one of the Schneider twins - Lions from North - son of an aristocrat from King’s surroundings and a high priest. Both of them, alongside with their distant cousin, Dimitri, lived good and decent life behind Wall Sina, until a certain accident. When he was 7 years old he was abducted with his sister and cousin, as well as with other children from each Wall. They were held in some kind of underground laboratory. Cruel experiments and genetic changes, caused them a lot of painful memories and phobias. Except of course because your OCs are just so perfect they never ever experience these traumas. Let me tell you something: YOU ARE BEING OFFENSIVE TO LITERALLY EVERYBODY WITH PTSD. Especially since they were children who were subjected to cruel torture! They would not be okay! They would be mentally unsound and be unable to trust anybody! They’d be paranoid! They’d have issues dealing with their emotions! They’d have flashbacks and nightmares and phobias! You cannot get rid of PTSD in no time at all! Some people never get better! JUST STOP. After a year of searching his parents finally managed to rescue all of the children. In a year, you say. I doubt if this were a covert operation that their parents would be able to find them in a year. Some of them were already dead, in result of the experiments. Higher-ups covered up this accident, but it still remains in hearts of the rescued kids. The experiments were conducted by army to create a new type of titans, that could control others and wouldn’t kill people. They were named the Berserkers. Only a few of them were considered successful, beside them Ivan, whose operation codename was “Kérberos”. 
Unlike Lena, Ivan didn’t become so obsessed with revenge on those who conducted experiments. But he still wanted to punish them at any cost. Do you realize how much of a contradiction this is? He wasn’t obsessed with revenge, but he wanted to punish them at any cost. You are literally saying he is obsessed with revenge. After a few years of rehabilitation and peace, he decided to join the army with other Berserkers. They could reach the King’s surroundings through well passed exams and promotions, and kill anyone that was responsible for their tragedy. In the end, Ivan didn’t make it to Military Police and joined Scouting Legion instead. I’m just wondering how he didn’t make it into the Military Police when his stats are so high.
With his friends, he finally discovered the truth behind the experiments and as well as their goal - the Berserkers where just a half product. The goal was to create an ideal titan being, called now the Neo Berserker that was supposed to be used in coup d’etat and abolition of the King. Again, it is still never explained who these higher-ups were and why they were doing this. Do you realize that you are treating your readers as if they are stupid by assuming they will believe this? The higher-ups already have power, what reason do they have for trying to take down the monarchy and the powerful people in society? And besides if you read the manga (which I’m sure you haven’t) you’d know that the King is just a figurehead, and all of his decisions are influenced by aristocrats and the Wallists anyways. So they literally have no reason to try and take out the “higher-ups”.  Both Schneiders and other Berserkers decided, that they will do everything they can to stop that faceless organization from taking over the reign and then fulfil their personal revenge.

Now that the most recent chapter of the manga has come out, let me tell you a thing. Humans/titans are not turned into shifters by a serum. This should probably be amended in my previous critique. They are turned into shifters by eating a shifter. Therefore it is literally impossible for these scientists to turn these children into shifters.

 Reasons
The main reason Ivan joined the army is the same as his sister’s: to carry out revenge on the organization and higher-ups responsible for the experiments that ruined their lives. But after realising the real goal of creating Berserkers, he decided to protect the kingdom first. Joining Scouting Legion was not planned and made a few complications with the whole thing, but in the end they accepted it as a good thing – Ivan could keep a close eye on titans inside and outside the Walls and make reports about their unusual behavior at first hand.

Why did he even bother joining the Scouting Legion if he’s lazy and a big baby? Why does he wanna become Commander when being mature and having a strong personality are two traits that are absolutely necessary for becoming Commander? There is literally no benefit to being Commander. Have you read the manga? Do you see what Erwin Smith has to deal with all the time? I highly doubt a lazy, baby couch potato can handle what Erwin Smith has to.

 Goals
Ivan’s goals are simple. Taking revenge and protect his family from all evil. He strikes for the position of the next commander of Scouting Legion. He also jokes that he wants to be the next King.

You said Ivan is not as obsessed with revenge as his sister. Yet his main reason for joining the military is revenge, and the first thing you list in his goals is taking revenge. In the last sentence of his history you state he wants to “fulfill personal revenge”. Yeah, right, not as obsessed as his sister you say. Did you actually read what you wrote before you posted it online?

 Statistics
Intelligence - 4/10
Social Skill - 10/10
Vitality - 9/10
Speed - 10/10
Battle Skill - 9/10

While your entire personality is full of flaws, I still say he’s too overpowered. For somebody who’s super annoying and rude and likes to pull pranks, wouldn’t his social skill be lower? And if he’s lazy why are his battle skill and speed so high? He’d procrastinate doing any sort of work.

 Likes/Dislikes
Ivan loves to be the leader in everything, mint candies, flirting and fighting.
He dislikes being alone, working, liars and noisy people similar to him.

 Habits
Making jokes, sleeping, smoking cigarettes, eating candies.

Wow, so original. Having one sibling the exact opposite of the other. You do realize that siblings usually end up sharing some similar traits because they both come from the same two people, right? Unless Lena and Ivan are in no way blood related. But honestly, everybody does the whole “siblings who are opposites” thing. Why not go for something more original?

 Other
- His full name is “Ivan Octavian Caspar Schneider”. Why such a long name? It’s honestly so unnecessary.
- Ivan is a Berserker by name of ” Kérberos “. He was rejected as Neo Berserker because he cannot use his power when he wants (has problems in changing into titan form).
- He has two tattoos of lion’s head on his hands. This is such weak symbolism. A lion represents fierceness, bravery, and regality. Your character represents none of these traits. Try going for a potato instead. Unless of course you’re going for the fact that male lions are lazy and don’t do anything, then this symbolism is perfect for him. But you should probably explain that.
- Ivan uses a special type of blades for fighting, designed by his sister. I’m sorry, but you cannot do this. There are standard issued blades for a reason. If he doesn’t like following the rules then he shouldn’t be part of the military.
- He admires his mother greatly. When you add a trait to a character it should usually come with a “why”. I read the backstory and tried to see why he would admire his mother, but I don’t see any reason to. Unless this goes back to him being a “big baby” and he’s a momma’s boy.

 Overall

This is my lovely bby Hikari, She is the most uuber perfs OC that I’ve evar made~

She is a half human half chipmunk hybrid after becoming a mew mew and she is the best mew EVARRR!!!1!! She can use the mew aqua rod even without any because she is just totes perfect~

once she became the MOST POWERFIL MEW EVA she got bored and moved to the sea, whrer she discovered that she was the super secret 8th mermaid princess, and she rules all teh seas becasue she is sooo beauteeful and amazing!!Then, she decided to go to equestria and she became a super powerful alicorn and she rules there too and celectia and luna and evryone is totes in love with her (but she is super straight guyzz no yuri thnx)

Finally, she moved to the sonic world and married sonic and had 20 bootiful babies and they all went to different worlds and married the main protagonists.

the best OC I ever made.

when i was about 13 i was super in to DNAngel, the first really big thing i ever got in to. so, naturally, i made a shitty oc.

her name was sora hikari, and for whatever reason she was the sister of both hiwatari and niwa, as if it made logical sense then or now, and like the two protagonists had an alter ego that stole art, but her name was seraphia.

and y’know, two tone hair and different coloured wings. why not, it makes so much sense in context.