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We've all made them.
And they have some angsty terrible past.

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I have had many Mary Sue ocs over my lifetime, but I’ll submit my first one ever for now. (I don’t have any pictures, sorry)

She was a Harry Potter character who was both Harry’s twin sister and also half fire-fairy. This was before I understood how children come about, so this made sense in my 3rd grade mind. She also was an Animagus and was Crookshanks. She was an Animagus because Sirius Black had picked her up after the whole Voldemort-killed-her-parents (But not Harry for some reason??) and somehow managed to take her to jail with him to raise her. I don’t even know. She, of course, knew the future and came to help out her dear brother whom she had always wondered about but never met, (I guess being raised in jail would do that) and decided the best way to go about this was to get adopted as a cat by Hermoine. Also being half fire-fairy gave her sometimes-there-sometimes-not wings and special fire powers. And only her and Harry working together could defeat Voldemort. At one point, I think Draco was in love with her, of course. Her name was Anna.

And here’s my first Zelda fancharacter!

She has basically all the hallmarks of that fandom’s sue profile. She had a fourth Triforce, the Triforce of Time (represented by the BORDER of the Triforce not the center triangle wasn’t I so original??)

She was selected at birth by the Goddess of Time. Oh yeah she was human and from Earth and was magically transported to Hyrule where she fell in love with Vaati and then became best friends with the Four Swords Links. Then they betrayed her and used her to kill Vaati, except Vaati survived and returned a couple years later and she taught him how to be not evil.

Then this prince from her original world came and kidnapped her to marry her and Vaati went and fought him to the death for Hayley back and then they returned to Hyrule and built a new castle in the Wind Ruins and had three kids together.

Oh yeah and she had the power to stop time. With her Triforce.

(Not sure how to upload more than one photo so I put them all together.) 
Turning myself in for this one OTL
Meet my favorite OC’s dark past. These drawings and the bio are from about two years ago, since then she’s been heavily updated! Only thing that’s the same is her outfit/design, but even that’s been tweaked here and there. Every time I look back on this I just about die, and I feel she belongs here //D 
(Also feel free to put a readmore anywhere since I know this is a bit long!)

Name:  Marina Bell

Age: Four

Looks:  
Human: [pictures up above]
Wolf: [picture up above]

 She has dark, dark grey eyes.

Personality:  Distant, paranoid, nice and sweet, short tempered, once you get to know her she can be ever so nice and kind. She is deeply hurt by her past and is hard to trust others, she only trusts her sister, her mate, and her sisters mate fully.

Pack: Mariposa Pack

Mate: Unnamed at the moment. [Ended up naming him Maverick, who was a totally OOC “wolf form” of a character from a show I liked with the name changed.]

Pups:  None, unable

Forms:  Human and wolf.

Power(s):  The power of darkness is her main, she can use water. She can know almost everything about anyone just by looking at them.  Her second strongest power is that she can steal others powers, temporarily, or permanently, such as shape-shifting.  Unable to feel much pain, and can’t die, only can one of stars and moons kill her. At one point when she is a more of a multiple personality

Past: Marina is something of a multiple personality, she later gets her own body, it’s a really complicated thing. As she was lost not really alive, but not dead, her father found her. She was taken into the wolf hell and kept there. Forced by her father Tokolay, and Skella, to train in fighting that only the darkest of wolves know, because of this, Marina is somewhat insane. She is not known to anyone but her father and Skella for she is a secret. She later is found out about. She prefers to be in human form rather than wolf, she is a master with her dagger since that is her weapon of taste. She was forced to kill the liars, kind of, she was put into situations that made her lose her mind, so forth,  crazy killer. She soon finds out why she feels different when she would kill, she had a multiple personality/processed by a demon that favored her body. Doeray has her own story and all but back the Marina. Marina has epilepsy, along with her mental issues, she is incredibly hard on herself. She has never forgiven herself for killing people, she is always haunted by their faces and screams every time she closes her eyes. Because of this she has so much trouble sleeping, along with being in a wolf hell more than half her life, with those troubles, she has only had one hour of sleep in her three years of life. She later on come into Echo forest, when she does she slowly warms up to everybody, and helps Ninja train the other wolves, and hone in on their powers. At one point a wolf come into the forest not sure how he got there, this wolf and Marina connect almost at once. The two fall in love and Marina has never been happier. After he leaves, he promises to come back. Now at four, she is the chosen one of death and darkness. (Special thing, a different story for another time) And her sister, Mishti is the chosen one of stars and moons. (Look above) They must fight to the death, Doeray takes over Marina during the battle, Marina is unable to do anything and would rather kill herself then her sister.

Weird fact: Her heart beats either really fast or so slow that you think her heart has stopped. 

[Feel free to cut this next part out! I thought some of you might get a kick out of it. It was going to be some *SUPER DRAMATIC AND EPIC FIGHT SCENE*, it never got finished though. What a shame.] 

I sat there in my dark “room”, the voices of the tortured echoed through the “walls” of sorts. In this place, there was no light, and heat, just cold, dark, pain. You see this was just a stupid “box” of blackness and pain, and I was stuck… Until I needed to switch into a “different personality” of sorts, you see I Marina was supposed to be born dead, a sister to Mishti, a daughter to Tania and Tokolay. Instead my sister and I were born into the same body kind of, it’s quite confusing, for we could split, but not easily, and not now, as far as I know… You see I’m here to protect Mishti from her “inner demons” (OH CHEEZY PHRAZING!!!) AKA: me, by not letting her see the death caused by a demon named Doeray, who wants to kill all liars, and blah, blah, blah, and such on. You don’t really want a history lesson right now I’m sure. Even if you do, YOU DON’T GET ONE!!!! I’m just mean like that, so deal. I was raised by Skella and Tokolay down in this beautiful hell pit, really this is the wolf’s hell.  BACK TO WHAT IS REALLY HAPPING RIGHT NOW: I heard my sister Mishti and Tokolay, whom I loathe, bickering about some stupid crap about MISHTI, not I, having the stupid destiny about killing the liars… In reality, only Skella and Tokolay know about me, so, Mishti is in for a big shock right now. I go through the something of a “door” It’s quite weird in here, nothing makes since, with the “walls”, “rooms”, “doors” and “doorways” and other annoying crap like that. SO back to where we are at in, I pushed pass Skella who was sitting by the “doorway”. I made my way over to Tokolay, who had Mishti pinned to the ground, and was snarling at her. (Now comes the good part, where he gets it!) Skella ran up to me trying to stop me, but, since I’m in human form (I almost always am, I just feel more comfortable that way) I pushed by her easily. I went right up to them, and pulled Tokolay off. I simply smiled and said: Hello Mishti, I’m you.” her face, was priceless. She looked up at me, “How can you be me?!” she asked, all was going to plan. “I’m not really you, I’m your sister in a sense, and my name is Marina.” I said. “Get back to your room Marina! Skella how did she get pass you?” Tokolay yelled, Skella had a shocked look on her face. “I don’t know, she never goes out…” Skella was, of course, scared for what Tokolay would say next. Mishti sat there, unsure of herself, and her surroundings, this was not good, she was weak, and could easily get attacked be Tokolay. I knocked Tokolay over, and pushed back Skella, I could take them both, easily, not that I would take them on in front of Mishti. 
[And that’s where it cuts off, bless.]

My lords and ladies, today I present to you a choice specimen. This OC is from Fire Emblem PoR/RD (though she probably was initally made for Smash Bros. instead), and has appeared on other MS blogs prior to this, resulting in a shitstorm and (though begrudgingly) a reform. Now, if said reform made her less of a Mary Sue she wouldn’t be here, but here we are anyway.

You don’t need to have any prior understanding to this series, other than it’s a turn-by-turn based strategy game, and characters come in the form of classes that conform to uniform designs and standard weapon counts/movements within a turn. With the sole exception of final bosses and the main protagonist, everyone is seemingly normal and are statistically balanced. The challenge in each of the games is to make the best out of your soldiers (dubbed as units) and bring down your enemies through strategy. Unless you’re playing on lower levels, it’s impossible for one-man-armies to exist. Your enemies are often as strong as you are, and going alone is suicide…

…But that doesn’t seem to be so, not with this Sue, who stylizes herself as the ‘Queen of the Swords’, despite not being of royal blood. Often she is depicted cutting down mountains of bodies with no explanation of whom or where they came from, or for her reason to do so, save to show off the fact she’s extremely, superbly strong. Do note that these are open starters for others to reply to, and her dialogues are either her boasting her strength, or looking down on the already-existing Crimean Queen Elincia, despite the latter being canonly one of the best rulers Tellius has ever seen. Akane’s reason for disrespecting Elincia (e.g., by not referring to her by a title despite not belonging to any other social status herself, seeing that her own ‘queenly’ title is all but name) is based on being raised knowing that royals are served everything they want. That excuse can fly for only so long, since Elincia canonly fights and bleeds alongside them, amongst other respect-worthy feats throughout the story. Akane has quoted to ‘have done more than any royal can ever do’, despite her story lacking any elements to top Elincia, save for her pre-established mastery with the sword, and still disrespects the Crimean Queen all the same in her interactions. Hey, we all can’t be caught with the same title, eh? Because having same titles are totally like getting caught in a party with the same dress. Eew.

As all Mary Sues, they completely miss the point of the whole series and in this case, Akane places herself within her universe as even more popular than the main character (also her pet squeeze), Ike, himself by being so well-known the masses call her a ‘queen’, while Ike is merely known as ‘The Hero of Blue Flames’. Mind you, that only happened after two whole fucking games’ worth of achievements. 

This RP OC’s posts that contain nothing other than sneering at other canon characters for being perpetually inferior to her standing, or to /kill off said canon characters with little to no provocation. A favourite of hers to torment and terrorize is FE: Awakening’s Lucina. Yes, Lucina, only because she simply looks like Akane, swings a holy sword and is a genuine female sword-wielding royal. (You can imagine the burn when Lucina got confirmed for Smash. Haha.) Then there’s also her being snappy at Soren, probably because he’s the closest person to Ike in canon. She’ll hang onto the excuse that her character was possessed by a dark Goddess who compells the darkness inside of her to rise, and to go on murderous rampages. Surprisingly enough, very little RP partners actually stick through those threads, because the only option is to be dramatically killed, mary-sue style.

Oh, and she does a large share of bragging that Main Protag-Mercenary Ike is her one and true love, through ways of shippy art, and porn. There’s virtually nothing wrong with any canon/oc pairing, unless it 1) Doesn’t make sense and is OOC, 2) the art is traced.

Unfortunately, Akane qualifies as both.

Ike, the main character, is a dense brick who is about 700% focused on fighting for his friends. Plus, I doubt someone who views everyone as equals despite racial or national standing would fall in love with an arrogant, self-obsessed swordswoman who took on the title as ‘Queen’ all because that’s apparently ‘what other people named her’, and that ‘she deserved it more than Elincia did’. A good canon Ike would either a) friendzone the shit out of this cray lady or b) focus on the Goddamn war he’s fighting.

You can also tell that some of her work definitely traced off Visual Novels or lame shit hentai (nsfw tags), by looking at how drastically inconsistent her art is. Taking into consideration that all this art was made within a span of 2-3 months, there’s more than enough evidence to prove that her art has been heavily traced.

Comparing figures A to E, we have the almighty sword queen piercing the hearts of her people with her expandable ass size. If anyone questions the obvious, always say that it’s the mun playing around with size variation; we all need our fun, no matter how illogical or unrealistic.

Of course, we can’t leave a sue in the dirt and constantly poke holes at her, can we? We need to give a bit of help for the creator to fix this legendary train wreck of an original character, else we’ll just be branded as haters like the many other people who have tried to fix this OC. For agreeing to this, you’ll be branded as a hater, too, and there will be a fuckload of anons praising the Queen and claiming that they’ll bow to her wwwwww what the fuck is that shit

Say we’d let Akane retain her unparalelled strength to continuously slay innocents with her glowing sword that’s totally not blessed by Tellius’ Goddess (because that’s solely reserved for important characters only), then that illogical body (that has birthed two children) has to change up.

As far as I know, there’s only one character who has done a mountain’s worth of slaughter by his own hand, and it’s this guy right here.

This Red Lobster reject is strong enough to completely wipe out a nation’s elite forces by his lonefuckingsome, and let’s say Akane is about twice as more skilled as he is, because Walhart there could only manage one while the glorious queen could do two.

She needs to have his physique, won’t you agree?

There, all fixed… Physically, that is. We’ve yet to touch her background, whatever it was, because the blog itself is too cringeworthy to explore. I’ll leave that to anyone to fix, along with her art to gloriously redline.

To be honest, several people have tried to fix her character, and nothing could be done without an insane level of sacrifices. So, what do you think, my good ladies and gentlemen? Can you save this sue, or should we toss her down into the pit of shame?

P.s., RP-wise, this character is literally on to bang or outdo anything canon. Anything. She went so far as to bang Bowser once.

Yes, this Bowser; I wish I was joking, but she did. 

There’s this guy on recolor.me…

Here is his oc and what he says on his oc when he’s not harassing random females for nudes and sexual imagery:

UGHHHHHHHH

Is that ‘The Admirable/The Adorable Princess’, herself!?

-////-

(No really, that’s what her first two names actually mean when together, I found out. ‘Miranda’ means Worthy of Admiration and ‘Creusa’ means Princess, actually.)

In terms of personality, she’s the prettiest one in more ways than one.

I’d reveal more about her in terms of personality-based backgrounds and name meanings, but I’m not sure if you’d rather save them for the PMs/fan-mail or hear me list more.

If that lady really is who I think she is, she feels so pretty.

Either Ruby Red or Amethyst would be the ‘default’ colors of her eyes, sure she can change them at will but those are the usual colors she’d wake up to, in fact.

I am happy to stare, either way because it feels like it’s based on a picture of her that was taken. Where’s that ‘blush’ smile when you wanna use one in this site!?

She’s Loving, Committed, Self-Confident, Playful, Trustworthy, Empathetic, Open-Minded, Imaginative, Powerful and generally Self-Reliant.

Might I do well as to add more, by all means?

Yes, I dare add more, because she often has Doves and Sparrows flocking towards her, usually Turtledoves when Doves appear. She also works to check out whenever there be flaws in any kind of relationship she’d know of, and see if they can be repaired in fact for good measure.

I daresay that if she senses Romantic Affections at work between two or more people, regardless of Gender or Orientations, she’s gonna find some way or another to work it out tastefully no matter the endgame verdict for that matter.

Alright, let’s play ‘remember your old sues and suffer’. Best game, I know.

Years ago, in a galaxy far far away, I was into one specific anime; Sailor moon.

I started out with a cutesy thing where my OC was “Sailor Star” or “Sailor Pink Star” since I don’t remember which one. I’m going with Star since it seems the less-sue option. In weeaboo!me’s defense, I didn’t know about Star Fighter and them since I only had watched the English episodes. She was based off of me with brown hair and blue eyes, and was a transfer student from America who ended up meeting Serena and went to her home and ended up teased by her little bro. Then they went for ice cream and oh no someone’s attacking and Luna magically appeared and suddenly magical girl. She could send stars as attacks, and was one of the strongest scouts but not stronger than Serena.

Another sailor sue I had, I don’t remember her name so I’m gonna call her Sailor Dark. Anyway, her job was apparently to kidnap Darien since for some odd reason, she was kidnapped and turned into a dark scout or whatever. She would fake like she was returning to normal and grab Darien when he ran over to check on her.

Well, I haven’t played the game myself but I did see a few clips of some gameplays of it. (Didn’t watch the whole videos though, too freaky… >w`<; ) But I do like the fan art being made of the animatronics~ X3 So inspired, I decided to create a character of my own with my SAI magic. But instead of an animal, my character is a doll, which makes it more creepier…~ :plotting: Her name is ‘Baby-Doll.’
Full Name: ’Baby-Doll’ (Jade)


Alias: The Doll


Occupation: Animatronic Children’s Entertainer/Singer


Powers/Skills: Can quickly rotate her head 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise to view what’s behind her. Able to distract her victims with a disturbing melody to give fellow animatronics the chance to strike.


Hobby: Entertaining children/singing


BIO: ’Baby-Doll’ was once a normal human, a young adult named Jade who lived with her uncle. Despite losing her loving parents when she was fourteen, Jade had no trouble making friends. She first heard about Freddy Fazbear’s Pizza when reading an old article about the horrific event in 1987, when a customer was severely injured by one of the mascots. A week later, Jade was then invited to a friend’s child’s birthday party at the same place, finding it quite quaint but secretly creepy. 
One night however, a few of Jade’s closest friends decided to explore the restaurant after dark as a dare, and persuaded Jade to tag along. The dare backfired, unfortunately as they were all locked in and eventually, encountered by the animatronics during the late hours of the night. Witnessing her friends being brutally murdered one by one, Jade was the last to remain as she begged for mercy in song (mainly singing to calm her nerves. Singing was a hobby of Jade’s as well as baking) Intrigued by her sweet voice (especially Freddy) and sensing she had suffered enough, the animatronics offered Jade a deal - to become one of them. Work for them, and promise to remain at Freddy’s forever and her life will be spared. Jade hesitatingly agrees, giving her word and disappears with the antimatronics to ‘embrace’ her fate.
Jade was never found or seen again, along with the bodies of her friends. But the very next day, after their disappearance, there was a new addition the restaurant’s mascots - a petite animatronic doll with a frilly apron (a symbolization that she loved to cook and bake) which possesses a striking resemblance to the missing Jade. The name ‘Baby-Doll’ was given to her, due to her ‘charming’ appearance. The doll can be found on stage, singing with the other mascots or sometimes solo, which is very enchanting. How she came to be will never be known…and sometimes at night, an eery melody can be heard, drifting through the restaurant…a sharp head turning 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise…grinning in the dark as a fatal distraction…~ :evillaugh:

Keri Maria

Okay, I found a Fairy Tail OC that I just can’t seem to understand one bit. I even think it broke my brain a little. Sorry if she does the same to every one else. I’m probably going to say a few things to point out where my brain may have broke.

Many had said if I had any Fairy tail OCs, well, here she is!

her name is Keri Maria, she is a Glass Dragon Slayer from the Mermaid Heel guild. She was formerly from Lamia Scale but gave up after always not being noticed. She has aquamarine eyes and icy blue hair, she has an exceed named Xel. She’s often a very stubborn and sassy type. She is also not the very competitive type. She is always unbeaten by a lot of other mages. After a battle between Natsu, she admitted that it was her first lost and started calling Natsu “my fiancé”, but Natsu keeps running away due to the fact that she is quite creepy and will keep doing so until she gets what she wants. In the Games, the reason she wasn’t there was because she keep ranting on what will happen to her hair and she might break a nail. If ever anyone had harmed any part of her body, she will snap!

Glass Dragon Slayer? I think it’s weird and maybe someone thinking of being like Gajeel, but seriously? Why glass? o.o Also, Natsu wouldn’t be scared of her for that. Do we see him doing that when Lisanna basically does the same thing? No, he just gets a look like leave me alone, so you made the canon go OOC for what reason?

She has a bad attitude at times, and also quite unlucky at certain times. If she doesn’t have what the others have, she will automatically turn them into her enemy or obstacle. They are also times she would make fun of a certain person’s fashion statement. She gets hated and loved quite a lot. 

So she is also a spoil brat. Check. Also, so far I have seen no reason for this chic to be love. Hated for being a Sue yes a spoil brat, and for being hateful to other people I can see, but loved, not so much.

As as a dragon slayer, she can either eat glass or sand(she gets made fun because of it), a first generation dragon slayer who was trained by Arinami. In a few trainings, she realizes she could also control sand, but still hasn’t master it yet.

She’s a Glass Dragon Slayer. Yes, I know you can melt sand into glass, but you have a have a heat source for that to happen, so your also trying to tell us she can eat flames. -_- If you haven’t notice dragon slayers only eat one type of thing, with Natsu being an exception and future Rogue because of him getting Sting’s magic, but no other dragon slayers have ate something that wasn’t from their magic. Also, she can only control glass if she is a dragon slayer. -_-

she is 19 years old of age and often hangs out with Wendy when visiting the Fairy Tail guild. But mostly she hangs out with Beth Vanderwood. 

Okay, I don’t see a problem with this, so I’m glad this is over. I think my brain may have broke again while doing this. I think I’m going to go back to bed and dream that it’s tomorrow. Later.

Okay so, this person here has A LOT OF GOD CHARACTERS AND SHIT AND ITS FUCKING ANNOYING.

the 1st ones name is Kitty, she is a god ???? and HAS HER OWN RELIGION AND HAS A SHITLOAD OF FOLLOWERS, NOBODY CAN KILL HER ( OR ANOTHER ONE OF THEIR OCS NAMED DEAN ) OR THEIR CHARACTER WILL BE EXECUTED ???? And they also have a bunch of fucking powers like they can get set on fire without dying and can teleport people and mind control them and shit. 

and the 2nd one. His name is Mr.Meowsers ( what the fuck kind of name is that ) and he can apparently turn into a human and he kills everyone ????? like all of the other gods and shit ???????? even though the gods in the first place couldn’t be killed but SOMEHOW HE DID IT????? He can also mind control others like Kitty can.

and the 3rd ones name is Jimmy, a fucking caterpillar.

Just 

Why.

Apparently he can also turn into a human and when hes in his caterpillar form he can grow arms and shit like that. He also has the same fucking mind control powers which. Why would you mind control others in the first place? They should be able to control their own fucking characters, but no. You gotta be a fucking take control of them and can make them do whatever. Why.

and the 4th one is a fucking centipede demon thing I don’t even know how to spell his fucking name.

He can apparently kill things to without dying and just

What. The fuck ? ?? ?

( She ALSO SHIPS SOME OF HER OTHER CHARACTERS WITH CANON CHARACTERS FROM THE GAME “OFF” )

When I was 7 I made a Sonic OC… you know where this is going right…? Like most sonic OCs, he’s a recolor of an existing character

He basically shadow but white and blue and I had no idea what I was thinking back then but made him so over powered that he could basically face one of those god-monster things that super sonic fights even without the chaos emeralds and stuff.

I gave him all sorts of powers and I sorta regret making him that since, now that I think about it, if I put him in a sonic game, he would get boring to play as very quickly…

this is a self-submit that i cant believe i didnt submit earlier

the character isnt really a fan character of any kind (though she did change whenever i joined a new fandom and/or got new clothes lmao) and is pretty much just a giant sue 

the text at the bottom thats cut off says “at first glance” btw

jesus christ this used to be my persona

let’s make a check-list shall we

  • werepire
  • demon
  • shinigami
  • shape-shifter (her cat hat changes animals to whatever she wants and she gains some phsyical resemblance to said animal so thats why she has cat ears/tail with the cat hat??? christ)
  • able to harness electricity
  • able to harness dark electricity?? whatever that is

apparently the amazing reasoning behind why this character had all these powers and abilities is b/c a wolf goddess was playing tricks on her and caused all of that to happen?????

the original story was that she was just a normal orphan girl whose parents died on a trip to paris in a plane accident and she lived alone in a cabin in the woods and just drew all day and surfed the internet i guess??  but she was also part of this teen organization that fought crime and hunted down murderers and i dont understand anymore

anyway she had this wish journal right.  she wrote in it one day that she wished her characters would come to life b/c she was lonely and she also wished she was a werepire for SOME REASON

this wolf appeared in her yard and she followed it ??? and she came to a meadow where the wolf disappeared and one of her characters was in the field and was like “hey” and then she went home and all her other characters were there suddenly and shes like holy shit

the rest of the story is weird b/c this dude apparently cloned one of her characters b/c he wanted a son and he died and the clone turned evil and cloned all her characters to make this clone army and the whole story was just so elaborate and i cant believe i put so much time into it /i literally wrote a novel revolving around this character/

not to mention this character was practically a self-insert of me into my own fictional world (no canon characters in there, just…hundreds of ocs that all lived in the same house) and she changed whenever i did?? shes not my persona anymore and thank god i dont draw like that anymore too but shes still an oc of mine that im very fond of (and ive taken away almost all of those abilities and reverted her back to her original abilities which was just shapeshifting to go with the story OTL her gender’s even changed too)

i think the worst part (besides the top-heavy werewolf form and the unbelievable amount of shit to go with her) was the description on dA:

GOOOOOGGGGG this took FOREVUURRRR…

…and it’s SO HUGE. >:U

Eh.

This is a reference for my persona, Nat Vladimira. I hope she’s not forgotten already. X’D

l’I

… Anyway…

The words cut off at the bottom say “first glance.” Not very much else to say here.

The cat form she has is just a general animal form. For all her forms, the markings and accessories are the same.

BEFORE YOU SAY ANYTHING, the reason she has all this crap to do with her species and attributes is due to the fact that a wolf goddess was messing with her and gave her the powers/abilities/traits. This caame from an attempted novel that I am currently -attempting- to rewrite. 

So… Ja…”

im so sorry you had to read that

so in summary nat vladimira was a terrible terrible sue but ive made her better and i still love her to death even with that terrible terrible history o/ glad i could share her with u

My First Mary Sue

Ok so, when I was about seven or eight, my brother and I were introduced to the LEGO Bionicle toys and comic, which was basically about the Toa, robots with elemental powers, saving the world. There was a lot of lore and mythology to it, and I loved it to pieces. Naturally, I wanted to insert myself into such a fantastic story and made up a character to do just that. I didn’t write anything down or draw anything about her, possibly because I was embarrassed of her even then, likely because that would be work and I was a lazy little rugrat, so I’m just saying what I can remember.

Her name was Ashleya (My name with an ‘a’ on the end - so clever!). She was a human kid in a world with absolutely no humans or humanlike creatures to be found - though in fairness, at the time I didn’t see any evidence that the island the story took place on just didn’t have any humans on it, but there were humans elsewhere. She traveled around with the Toa on their very dangerous missions, despite being a kid, and all of them openly loved and doted on her like an adorable little sister, even though some of them have trouble expressing anything other than deep dislike to anyone.

She was absurdly powerful. She could copy anyone’s powers by thinking of them, though the only time I specifically remember her using it is one time she failed at it and everyone got their asses kicked like in canon.

Her story was the main antagonists of the arc where I got into the story were holding her prisoner, and she got free when the Toa were fighting them. There was no explanation for how where she came from or how she got her powers.

Also she could surf on lava.

SnK OC - Ivan Schneider

Remember that atrocity Lena Schneider? Well this is her brother, and boy oh boy, it’s just as bad as the other one, if not worse. As usual, my comments are in bold.

Birthday
22nd July

Nationality
German-Russian

Personality
Humanity’s laziest. First procrastinator, couch potato and biggest baby in Scouting Legion. He hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him. Noisy and annoying, likes to be in centre of everything. Stupid pranks and rude comments are Ivan’s trademarks. On the other hand he is very charismatic and great at leading people; natural born commander. I’m calling bullshit, and let me tell you why. Because nobody is going to follow a lazy person into combat. Nobody. And no, you cannot just go from being the laziest, couch potato who procrastinates doing things he doesn’t want to do to being a charismatic, natural born commander. This doesn’t work. You said it yourself, he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, and in order to be a Commander you need to be mature and be able to show other people that you are worth following. Sorry, this just doesn’t work.
When working, Ivan likes to work with people - he hates being alone. Usually doing some physical trainings or other activities since he can’t stand “brain-thingies”. Who even wants to work with him when he’s rude and pulls pranks on people? Who even takes him seriously when he’s lazy and a big baby? Ivan can be also grumpy and sad, but it’s a really rare event for the man. Then why even put this in here when it’s a rare thing? You’re only supposed to put relevant information on the character sheet.

Okay, let me break this down for those of you folks who aren’t going to survive until the very end. He is Humanity’s Laziest, yet all his stats – except for his intelligence – are at 9s and 10s. This is Humanity’s Laziest. He also wants to be the next Commander of the Scouting Legion, yet the author states that “he hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him”. Tell me something, how is joining the Scouting Legion and becoming Commander going to profit you at all? It’s full of danger and hard work, all the things Ivan hates. And he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, correct? Why even go into the Scouting Legion if you don’t like hard work and are a big baby? Why not go into the Garrison?

 Background
Ivan is one of the Schneider twins - Lions from North - son of an aristocrat from King’s surroundings and a high priest. Both of them, alongside with their distant cousin, Dimitri, lived good and decent life behind Wall Sina, until a certain accident. When he was 7 years old he was abducted with his sister and cousin, as well as with other children from each Wall. They were held in some kind of underground laboratory. Cruel experiments and genetic changes, caused them a lot of painful memories and phobias. Except of course because your OCs are just so perfect they never ever experience these traumas. Let me tell you something: YOU ARE BEING OFFENSIVE TO LITERALLY EVERYBODY WITH PTSD. Especially since they were children who were subjected to cruel torture! They would not be okay! They would be mentally unsound and be unable to trust anybody! They’d be paranoid! They’d have issues dealing with their emotions! They’d have flashbacks and nightmares and phobias! You cannot get rid of PTSD in no time at all! Some people never get better! JUST STOP. After a year of searching his parents finally managed to rescue all of the children. In a year, you say. I doubt if this were a covert operation that their parents would be able to find them in a year. Some of them were already dead, in result of the experiments. Higher-ups covered up this accident, but it still remains in hearts of the rescued kids. The experiments were conducted by army to create a new type of titans, that could control others and wouldn’t kill people. They were named the Berserkers. Only a few of them were considered successful, beside them Ivan, whose operation codename was “Kérberos”. 
Unlike Lena, Ivan didn’t become so obsessed with revenge on those who conducted experiments. But he still wanted to punish them at any cost. Do you realize how much of a contradiction this is? He wasn’t obsessed with revenge, but he wanted to punish them at any cost. You are literally saying he is obsessed with revenge. After a few years of rehabilitation and peace, he decided to join the army with other Berserkers. They could reach the King’s surroundings through well passed exams and promotions, and kill anyone that was responsible for their tragedy. In the end, Ivan didn’t make it to Military Police and joined Scouting Legion instead. I’m just wondering how he didn’t make it into the Military Police when his stats are so high.
With his friends, he finally discovered the truth behind the experiments and as well as their goal - the Berserkers where just a half product. The goal was to create an ideal titan being, called now the Neo Berserker that was supposed to be used in coup d’etat and abolition of the King. Again, it is still never explained who these higher-ups were and why they were doing this. Do you realize that you are treating your readers as if they are stupid by assuming they will believe this? The higher-ups already have power, what reason do they have for trying to take down the monarchy and the powerful people in society? And besides if you read the manga (which I’m sure you haven’t) you’d know that the King is just a figurehead, and all of his decisions are influenced by aristocrats and the Wallists anyways. So they literally have no reason to try and take out the “higher-ups”.  Both Schneiders and other Berserkers decided, that they will do everything they can to stop that faceless organization from taking over the reign and then fulfil their personal revenge.

Now that the most recent chapter of the manga has come out, let me tell you a thing. Humans/titans are not turned into shifters by a serum. This should probably be amended in my previous critique. They are turned into shifters by eating a shifter. Therefore it is literally impossible for these scientists to turn these children into shifters.

 Reasons
The main reason Ivan joined the army is the same as his sister’s: to carry out revenge on the organization and higher-ups responsible for the experiments that ruined their lives. But after realising the real goal of creating Berserkers, he decided to protect the kingdom first. Joining Scouting Legion was not planned and made a few complications with the whole thing, but in the end they accepted it as a good thing – Ivan could keep a close eye on titans inside and outside the Walls and make reports about their unusual behavior at first hand.

Why did he even bother joining the Scouting Legion if he’s lazy and a big baby? Why does he wanna become Commander when being mature and having a strong personality are two traits that are absolutely necessary for becoming Commander? There is literally no benefit to being Commander. Have you read the manga? Do you see what Erwin Smith has to deal with all the time? I highly doubt a lazy, baby couch potato can handle what Erwin Smith has to.

 Goals
Ivan’s goals are simple. Taking revenge and protect his family from all evil. He strikes for the position of the next commander of Scouting Legion. He also jokes that he wants to be the next King.

You said Ivan is not as obsessed with revenge as his sister. Yet his main reason for joining the military is revenge, and the first thing you list in his goals is taking revenge. In the last sentence of his history you state he wants to “fulfill personal revenge”. Yeah, right, not as obsessed as his sister you say. Did you actually read what you wrote before you posted it online?

 Statistics
Intelligence - 4/10
Social Skill - 10/10
Vitality - 9/10
Speed - 10/10
Battle Skill - 9/10

While your entire personality is full of flaws, I still say he’s too overpowered. For somebody who’s super annoying and rude and likes to pull pranks, wouldn’t his social skill be lower? And if he’s lazy why are his battle skill and speed so high? He’d procrastinate doing any sort of work.

 Likes/Dislikes
Ivan loves to be the leader in everything, mint candies, flirting and fighting.
He dislikes being alone, working, liars and noisy people similar to him.

 Habits
Making jokes, sleeping, smoking cigarettes, eating candies.

Wow, so original. Having one sibling the exact opposite of the other. You do realize that siblings usually end up sharing some similar traits because they both come from the same two people, right? Unless Lena and Ivan are in no way blood related. But honestly, everybody does the whole “siblings who are opposites” thing. Why not go for something more original?

 Other
- His full name is “Ivan Octavian Caspar Schneider”. Why such a long name? It’s honestly so unnecessary.
- Ivan is a Berserker by name of ” Kérberos “. He was rejected as Neo Berserker because he cannot use his power when he wants (has problems in changing into titan form).
- He has two tattoos of lion’s head on his hands. This is such weak symbolism. A lion represents fierceness, bravery, and regality. Your character represents none of these traits. Try going for a potato instead. Unless of course you’re going for the fact that male lions are lazy and don’t do anything, then this symbolism is perfect for him. But you should probably explain that.
- Ivan uses a special type of blades for fighting, designed by his sister. I’m sorry, but you cannot do this. There are standard issued blades for a reason. If he doesn’t like following the rules then he shouldn’t be part of the military.
- He admires his mother greatly. When you add a trait to a character it should usually come with a “why”. I read the backstory and tried to see why he would admire his mother, but I don’t see any reason to. Unless this goes back to him being a “big baby” and he’s a momma’s boy.

 Overall

V:tM gallery of horrors

Okay, so you asked about V:tM characters, and holy crap I’ve had to run for some terrible ones. There was this one guy that loved to make terrible Setites. He was the one who nagged me until I agreed to run the stupid game in the first place. Apparently, he just wanted to vomit up some horrible Stus. There was one character he INSISTED on playing in every game he could, forcing me to (after the fact) reconcile my plot with every other vampire game he’d ever been in because “it was the story of [character]’s life.” OH, SO GLAD YOU LET ME KNOW THAT AHEAD OF TIME. MASSIVE SARCASM QUOTES.

This character was named Natasha Pavell Alexsei Illyanakopf, and he was originally a seventh-gen Setite…. until he randomly decided he was a 5th-gen all along, and the childe of Nefertiti…. whom he also played. Pavell loved to kidnap mortal dudes, sire them, and have them altered to look exactly like him. I have no idea why. By the time he got to my game, he RANDOMLY decided he was in the Inconnu, and working on Golconda. Of course, being freshly transitioned from the Path of fucking Typhon, he knew SO MUCH MORE about Golconda than, for example, my Salubri. (As a side note, this guy also ran a game in which he wholesale ripped off Eternal Darkness, except he replaced Pious Augustus with FUCKING PAVELL.)

Then he got bored with Pavell, and decided to make another 5th-gen Setite, this one named Robert Varda Fillengaine (I don’t even know anymore). This guy, aside from having the most ridiculous stats I have ever seen, was horrendously overpowered. He had all the Potence, all the Dominate, all the Serpentis, all the Fortitude… none of which were actually on his sheet. His entry into the game came when he lolrandomly decided to murder a bunch of college girls with a prop sword. He was supposed to be working for Nefertiti, who was our main antagonist at the time, until he decided he was going to betray her and help the PCs. Aaaand then he got bored with that and was working for Nefertiti the whole time. *facepalm* Oh, and this douche looked “exactly like Hugh Jackman.”

Bored with Setites, he decided to make a psychotic Lasombra. THIS dude, Tyger Shelley, decided to OMG RANDOMLY murder people to try to provoke another player’s character to frenzy. (This character was the biggest Sue I’ve ever seen; she comes later.) I made him lose a lot of Humanity for that, and he decided that meant he suddenly developed a split personality. One was Tyger, and he was the DARK one. He had all the Obtenebration powers. Shelley, on the other hand, was the LIGHT one, and this guy kept trying to convince me to let him come up with a light-based Discipline like Obtenebration. I said NO. So he decided his character turned into an angel and ascended into heaven. I’m not kidding. He really said that.

His last terrible character was a literal self-insert. He wanted to play himself as a vampire, but only the super specialest of clans would do for him. He wanted to be a True Brujah, but he didn’t have to worry about that pesky no emotions thing. He just acted like the disaffected hipster douche he already was and called that good enough.

There was also a player in this game who was probably legitimately crazy. The only other character he ever played was a pretty stereotypical Dark Ages Brujah. After playing Redemption, I saw that this player had basically copypasted Christof and called it an OC. That guy wasn’t too bad. I had NO IDEA what hell I was in for when I let this psycho play a Tzimisce. He started out eighth-gen, which was the PC generation limit. (I tried.) He went around behind the other players backs, collecting all the clues and helpful NPCs I had, making sure no other players could progress in the plot. This led to over half of my players walking out. Once he had a stable of captive, blood bound NPCs, he moved in under the hospital and started building a lair of flesh. He had this fucking bunker full of weapons he didn’t ask me about and horrible Vicissitude things he never bought the ability to do. He also modified himself into what was basically a war form without paying the experience price for it. He looked like a xenomorph, and expected to have the same advantages. And that’s when he started really getting crazy. He wanted koldunic sorcery, which is largely unavailable in the modern age, so he decided my Tremere NPC could teach him. (Like that would happen.) Then he started fusing people into walls, terrorizing the players in and out of character, and randomly lowered his generation. The creepiest part was when, in regular conversation, he would start talking and acting like his character. He decided to name this abomination Adam Kadamon.

Then there was this girl…. she had no ideas for a character, so I tried to help her out. She was a 10th-gen Malkavian named Daria Brahms (a name she didn’t come up with), and I made her the childe of the former Malkavian primogen. The basic plot of this game was that every supernatural inhabitant of the city had vanished, and the PCs were supposed to find out what happened before they met the same fate. However, even when making her the childe of one of the victims, she was not motivated to do anything about it. She sat through every Elysium like a lump, and when forced to go out on missions, did not participate. That was probably the reason Tyger Shelley tried to provoke her, but she refused to roleplay her character in frenzy. She just said, “I can’t do anything, she’s crazy.” So I made her character accidentally kill a mortal.There were a ton of witnesses, so she had to be punished. To be fair to her, the prince character (the most patient Brujah in the world) set up a trial for her, so she could defend herself. She refused to speak. She wouldn’t listen to reason and she wouldn’t respond to an emotional appeal, so the Prince backhanded her. She acted like nothing happened. So finally, another character demanded that she convince them that her character deserved to live. Still, she sad nothing. So, after two hours of this nonsense, I had the character killed.

So the player ran shrieking into the bathroom and locked herself in for THREE HOURS, wailing and crying because her favorite character died. The player’s boyfriend eventually got her out. A few months pass, and she is still throwing a fit about this stupid character. Eventually I gave in and let her be torpored instead of killed. Little did I know I was loosing the ultimate Sue. When she got out, she decided that instead of being a twentysomething white blonde lady, she was a dark skinned, white haired young teenager. She went straight to the prince and his brother’s house, deciding to tell them she was the brother’s “long lost childe” named Tori. (Only because I vetoed her being “his child from the future like Chibiusa!!!1) Being a very good man, he decided to shoulder the burden and take care of this deadweight. She moved in and proceeded to creepily latch on to the brother, trying to alienate him from everyone around him. She randomly developed telepathy and sparklypoo healer powers, and was no longer a vampire. Oh, and she was an angel the whole time. Even when she was a vampire.

As an “angel,” she wasn’t any more proactive of a character. She just waifed around the house, waiting for people to ask why she was “upset,” or merrily skipping off to into every obvious trap I set. I decided to punish her for her stupidest decision (invading a Methuselah’s house to get back a locket) by having her idiocy get someone killed. Once again, the player locked herself in the bathroom, crying for three hours until I said none of it happened. After that, she decided her character was actually in love with the prince’s brother, even though she had passed herself off as someone no older than 14. She was a very childlike character, and she never discussed the change in relationship in or out of character. (The prince’s brother was not available, either, but since when does free will matter to Sues?) She decided it was TRUE LOVE FOREVER AND EVER, and started whining out of character at me to get rid of the love interest so she could be his girlfriend. (He wasn’t straight, either…) I refused for two years, even when she literally threw herself on the ground screaming and crying. So she had Tori “kill herself,” turn back into a white girl, go goth, and rename herself “Yami.”

I quit the game then.

This girl is turning herself in…

When I first got into My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, I went in with a skepticism towards the series but emerged with a love of the show that I finally understood. It took the end of the second season for me to create my first OC, a “secret alicorn princess” named Stellamara.

It’s really hard to look at her first form, now that made a complete rehaul to her character.

She was supposed to be the “SOOPER SEKRET DAUGHTER” of Princess Luna and a dark Mage I named Tenebris (he no longer exists.) Supposedly, her birth was covered up by the Equestirian Monarchy because Celestia found out about Luna’s affair with a dangerous criminal. And it also turns out that Stellamara also suffered from the Splash Effect (turning into a hippocampus/merpony after being exposed to water and gaining limbs back when dry.) Supposedly AGAIN, she would secretly help her “mother” raise the stars at night. Inquisitive and curious, she would often roam the castle libraries looking for everything/ANYTHING to read. Her biggest problem was her nosiness, stubbornness, and her inability to realize why she HAD to be kept a secret. Her magic prowess was strongest in Water, Ice, Illusions, and Dark (not deep deep DEEEEEEP dark like her father… like Pokemon dark type.)

I never rped with her or showed her off to anyone because everyone I knew actually had NORMAL interests; not ponies, anime, creepypasta or criminal psychology. Besides all of these secret interests, I was an instant bully-magnet just for living.

Anyway, after a few years of hiding Stellamara away, I found out about how taboo Alicorn OCs were/are. And how much of a monster I created. Surprisingly though, I wanted to keep her name. But I knew that her entire history/personality/design/etc. had to die.

So, here she is now!

I haven’t found a good cutie mark for her yet (personally, I want it to be a little more complex than average…) but she is skilled in water and ice magic, but mostly water. Though she was in Twilight’s year at Princess Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns, Stellamara has never met any of the main characters. While her grades were rather high, they weren’t the highest in the school (more like above-average.)She lusts for knowledge and sometimes lets her ambitions get to her head. She turns into a Velma when she loses her glasses but is too squeamish to put in contacts. I’m currently thinking of Stellamara having recurring nightmares of her past life as a Sue and trying to receive help for said nightmares.

If you ever get constructive criticism on your character, don’t act huffy and try to aggress that your character is “”KAWAII DESU AND OH SO PERFECT IN EVERY WAY AND U R JUST JELLY OF HER SUGOINESS.”

Just remember what Jimmy Neutron once said, “People are supposed to be flawed! Their flaws are what makes them perfect.”