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Akki and Hopefully not AkkixRogue

I wouldn’t normal do this type of thing since I don’t believe any OC is a Mary Sue/Gray Sue, but this one drives me nuts since the creator is going to apparently make Rogue go OOC just for her “yandere” character name Akki.

There is nothing in the details of the image and she has deleted the images of her OCs from her account after getting upset from someone on deviantART, deleted her account, and than came back. -_- The creator is nothing, but drama, but we’re not getting into that.

Akki is her Mary Sue that was originally creator by Tartarus, I think is the dark guilds name, for some reason that I don’t remember. However, this OC I know is suppose to be a “yandere”, but this character loves to kill no matter what.

Definition of a Yandere:

A common term in otaku fandom, a yandere is a person (usually female) romantically obsessed with someone to the point of using violent means to get them in their arms. Often seen with a sharp weapon and a psychotic grin.

If I remember, a true yandere does not enjoy killing, they just kill to get the one the love and to keep the one they love. They don’t love to kill like Akki does.

Also, the creator is doing a pairing contest where it is her OCxher OC, CanonxOC, or love triangle using both her two OCs and Rogue.

First off, Rogue wouldn’t have any interest in character like Akki. -_- Secondly, you make him totally go OOC with doing a love triangle. I really seriously think either this creator needs to stick with pairing her OCs with herself or with her friends and leave canons out of it because she is trying to change personalities to fit what she wants or she should just stick with what she said by deleting all her OCs and starting over. One of those would be the best. -_-

TRilia Ombre

Trilia is frm the same clan as Sasuke (Uchiha) and uses the same jutsu as him, sharingan ^^ That’s why her eyes are red

OMG!, It’s another Uchiha Clan member. I bet later on she becomes Sasuke’s sister. -_- Also, she can’t come from the same clan with a different last name, plus the only two Uchiha’s that were alive for the longest time was Itachi and Sasuke, but now Sasuke is the only one alive!!! Just stop with this madness with coming up with Uchiha Clan members. -_- You take away from Sasuke and Itachi if there is any!!!

Silver Ellan

Trilia and Stara’s third teammate. She’s from the Hyuuga clan just like Hinata and Neji and uses the same Jutsu they do ^^ That’s why her eyes are white.

No, she can’t use the same jutsu as them and she can’t be with that hair!!! Hyuuga’s have black hair!!! Good, I hate sue artist like this.

Stara Ulla

First off, this girl that keeps coming up with these OCs likes to steal other peoples OCs, change a few things about them, and than make what was an OC into a Mary Sue. Someone give this kid some help since she wants to be mean to others.

Teammate of Trilia and Silver. :3 She can use the same Jutsu Naruto uses.

She can’t have the same jutsu as Naruto because it would take away from him. -_- Your as bad as the ones that make Naruto’s sister.

Pokemon Sue

Sorry, for bring this Pokemon Sue up but it has really bother me along with some of my friends.

Made on Rinmaru ^^

Maria comes from a very wealthy family but is very weak and has poor eyesight. she has always wanted to become a Pokemon trainer but her family has forbid her from doing so. She runs away to begin her journey!

Pokemon she has:

Gothitelle

Gardevoir

Meloetta

Jynx

Umbreon

Delphoxin

the future I think I’m gonna make her kind of supernatural and she has psychic abilities a bit that helps her see and get through her days ^^ or maybe her Pokemon help her with it. not sure yet

Just no. Don’t even plan on bring psychic abilities to your sue. The only person in Pokemon I know of that had psychic abilities was Sabrina from a Psychic Pokemon Gym in the original series. You would just take away everything that character was. Infact, don’t give her any abilities at all. She isn’t a Pokemon  unless she is mixed, but that would be impossible!!!

Soyuki Lorikenn (Xiaolin Showdown OC)

Hi there, this is a review of an XS OC. Many of these are absolutely awful but I was part of this fandom and I knew these people so I won’t tear into them heartlessly. Many of them have gone on to create great characters, so there’s hope for us all.

My comments will be in italics

Name - Soyuki Lorikenn

Meaning - ‘So’ is for ‘Sophia’ that means ‘Knowledge’ in Greek; ‘Yuki’ means ‘Snow’ in Japanese

Age - 16/18

Nationality - American

Hometown - Macerata (Italy)

Ok to start with, her name sounds Japanese, but she’s an american who was raised in Italy. If she was raised in the USA with a Japanese parent I would over-look this. Most names that are ‘American’ in origin are mash-ups or weird spellings or words. What’s wrong with Italian names? There are two MCs who do not come from Asian countries and their names reflect that, there’s no need to have a Japanese-like name.

The last name is made up, it’s really not that hard to find last names.  

http://surnames.behindthename.com/ Here people, go wild. Here you can look up last names by their nationality.

Certified Birthdate - July 24th

Astrological Sign - Lion

Chinese Astrological Sign - Mouse

Gender - Female

Nickname - N/A

My only issues with this are nit-picking and I’m not 100% sure English is this OC owner’s first language. It’s Leo and Rat, not Lion and mouse.


Physical Description

Hair Color- Light brown

Eye Color - Sea Blue

Weight - 56 kg

Height - 168 cm

Figure - Tough

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Not bad height and weight. After throwing that through some converters into Imperial I found she’s about 5’5 and 127 lbs. In the proper weight category for sure.

Although with body-type I think she meant muscular? If so then the weight works out with it. It’s not close to the bare minimum and those muscles would make her heavier.

Personality

Soyuki has a half-hearted personality, she doesn’t like to spend time with monks, except for training, where she shows a great capacity forteamwork. She hates jokes, is always on the defensive when someone speaks to her, and may seem very bad, even though in reality she does her best to be friendly. But when someone shows her friendship, she’s very sweet and cuddly with that person or people.

O…K? I have no idea what half-hearted means but I’m willing to throw that under the bus of bad translation. Her personality is pretty consistent, if a little over-used, until that last part. ‘even though in reality she does her best to be friendly’. She’s defensive, we’ve established that, she works well with others but that might just mean she can follow orders. People on the defensive aren’t friendly.

Ok so she doesn’t like jokes, what kinds of jokes? Because knowing what material is triggering for her would be a great way to develop her.

It’s basic psychology. Being defensive is your brain taking feelings inside and applying them to outside situations. You can’t be friendly and defensive, it just doesn’t compute. 

Personal Attributes

Good Habits - During the showdown, she focuses and puts all her energy, she doesn’t hesitate to protect others if they are in difficulty.

Bad Habits - Spends too much time alone listening to music, to avoid being in contact with others.

Fetishes/Strange Behaviors - Love blood and violence (for this when Raimundo bothers her or makes fun of her, she pulls out her claws,literally, and wounds him, sometimes becomes a tiger and attack the monks by surprise, even though makes as a joke, and she is careful tonot hurt them)

(For those of you unfamiliar with XS the premise of the show is that these four kids have elemental powers and use them to find magical artifacts called Shen Gong Wu. They have conflicts with the Heylin ‘evil’ side. The four kids are called ‘monks’ and the elements are Air, Water, Fire, and Earth. In Xiaolin Chronicles which is the new series there’s also Wood.)

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Ok, maybe a more detailed personality would help? If she focuses all her energy she’s determined and as for the rest… Why is she protective of the monks unless they make a joke and then all bets are off?

Why can she turn into a tiger, the only one who transforms into anything is Chase Young and he only does that because the Lao Mang Lone Soup made him into an immortal evil dragon-monk. 

Why does she take offense to these jokes? WHAT IS TRIGGERING THIS AGGRESSIVE BEHAVIOR?

Why does she love blood/violence? WHY IS NOTHING LIKE HIS HINTED AT IN PERSONALITY?

Ratings on Personal Qualities

Physical Strength - 10/10

[Since her human DNA is mixed with those of the big cats, her has several features that give her several advantages, for example, is nearly as fast as the cheetah, as silent as a panther, nimble and strong as a tiger and a lioness, also the senses are much finer and is often able toprevent an attack from behind.]

Attractive - 2/10

[Her cat ears and tail, intrigued who sees her for the first time. But her tough body doesn’t make her a very attractive girl.]

Honesty - 8/10

[She doesn’t like to lie, except when absolutely necessary, and sometimes she lie to Chase Young, her adoptive father, when she tells him thatis going to give a bit of trouble to the monks, but in reality she goes to train with them]

Sociability - 4/10

[Prefer to stay with the big cats allies of Chase, rather than with humans.]

Combat Statistics

Species/Race - Human half feline

Special Skills/ Magical Powers/etc The styles of workouts of Xiaolin monks and the Heylin one of Chase Young, make her ruthless and thoughtful at the same time.

Signature Shen Gong Wu - Thorn of Thunderbolt

Weaknesses in combat Water and Fire

Strengths in combat - Agile moves and responsiveness.

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Where to begin? Her strength is massively overpowered. How did she get ‘all the DNA of the big cats’? I sense an angsty backstory coming.

Small miracles folks, she’s not attractive. I kind of like that she mentions people who might have some sort of fetish for cat-ears and tail (maybe that’s why there are so many cat-girl OCs?). Maybe the scar is more disfiguring than her body? I dunno, I’ve seen girls with athletic bodies that are bomb-shells, like dang.

Oh more hinting at an angsty back-story. Honesty is… Strange. I mean I can see Chase being honest, he was a xiaolin monk at one time, but her believably lying to him? He’s over 1000 years old, by that time you learn most tricks in the book. She’d have to be a great liar. Also a bit meh on the sociability aspect. It seems we’ve got an angsty back-story coming up.

Relationships Statuses

Closest Friend(s) - No one

Omi Omi often urge her during training, and in his way comforts her when she is sad. They are good friends, even if he doesn’t accept her hostility towards Raimundo.

Raimundo Soyuki is hyper-sensitive to jokes and pranks, and she doesn’t get along well with Raimundo because of his fun in make pranks and jokes, she knows he doesn’t mean to really hurt her, but this doesn’t stop her to react fiercely.

Kimiko - Being the only girl in the temple, Kimiko is kind to Soyuki, and share a passion for music. But often Kimiko intrudes when Soyuki andRaimundo fight, and she defends… the answer is obvious.

Clay - Clay and Soyuki are good friends thanks to the good-natured character of the cowboy. Soyuki chats happily with him, and teaches how to use the lasso, but when she uses it in the ”wrong” way, he gets angry and scares her.

Dojo - Their relationship is good, even if they don’t talk very often, and the gab of the dragon often irritates Soyuki.

Master Fung - She has a great respect for the teacher, obeys and she doesn’t complain the chores he gives.

Hated Rivals - Jack Spicer and Wuya, she thinks he’s a stupid and useless jerk and a pompous and vain witch.

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Ok where to begin… Omi is very protective of his friends and I don’t think he’d like Soyuki. If she understands that he’s not trying to hurt her feelings maybe she could dial the reaction back a bit. Or, maybe because she’s so honest, tell Raimundo why it bothers her? He’s not an unreasonable guy and I think he’d stop.

Ok Kimiko is in love with Raimundo, that’s canon and accepted. I think, though, Kimiko would try and figure out the reason for Soyuki’s violence. She has no trouble standing up to Raimundo and if she noticed that it was bothering Soyuki enough to incite violence I don’t think she would condone it.

As for Clay. He rarely gets angry. He’s portrayed as the most calm of the group and I doubt he’d get mad quickly if someone who has had no experience with lassos used one improperly.

Dojo and Fung. Well if she’s honest I wouldn’t think she’d be good at hiding her annoyance, most people who are honest aren’t good at hiding things. Consistency please.

Wuya and Jack are pretty spot-on though.

What I can find about this character’s background (it’s really inconsistent surprise surprise) Is that she’s some sort of genetically altered cat-girl. Who can change shape and came to China to learn martial arts. Really. I mean it’s not like she could do that anywhere else in the world. Nope her parents send her to China. There Chase finds her and abducts her. Why you may ask? Because she’s a genetically altered cat-girl and his minions are big cats of course! So he trains her (I don’t know why the only apprentice he’s ever had interest in is Omi because Omi shows great promise as a monk) and she escapes to go with the Xiaolin Monks.

She doesn’t have a cannon pairing (thank god) but she is the Dragon of Lightning. I mean, this doesn’t make much sense does it. In traditional Chinese lore there are 5 elements. It’s assumed that Raimundo’s ‘Wind’ takes the place of metal but now that there’s wood there’s no room for another Xiaolin Dragon. Oh in case you were wondering what her big-cat form looks like:

.:Here Comes The White Disaster:. [READ BELOW!] by StefyC97

How to improve this OC:

~Change the name

~More consistent personality and bio

~please no cat-girl. Chase’s warriors are either big cats or warriors, they don’t have cat-ears and tail.

~Change the bio, it sounds really contrived.

~Don’t make her a xiaolin dragon, no ifs ands or buts about it! There is no room in cannon for more dragons!

Nanase Uzumaki (Mermaid Melody and Naruto)

This is Nanase Uzumaki. 
She is daughter of Naruto, The fox and Hanon, Aqua Pearl Voice.
I draw a OC. She is Hanon and Naruto’s Oldest Daughter.

here is her 

Birth : 2nd May.
Parents : Naurto Uzumaki and Hanon Hosho.
Love Interest : None.
Farvorite Food : Steam Buns, Sushi and Ice Cream.
Weapon : Mixture of Schyte and Rod.
Song : Ever Blue.
Likes : Her Parents, Kakashi, Singing and Using Her Ice Power.
Dislikes : Chaos, gagging, Villains, Water Demons.
Force : Stronger like garuda.

Hanon is From Mermaid Melody. and Naruto from Naruto Shippuden.
Nanase Uzumaki Hosho is Her Full Name.
her name, Nanase was named after Hokuto and Kairi’s Younger Sister from Street Fighter EX.

Hanon Hosho © Pink Hanamori
Naruto Uzumaki 
© Masashi Kishimoto
Nanase Uzumaki 
© me

This is Artwork.

Ask me a request.

a mary-sue from Tim Burton’s The Nightmare Before Christmas. Her name is Violet and she’s a “fallen angel”. Hm. Wasn’t aware that was a traditional halloween monster but hey! Whatever! She’s also in love with the main antagonist, of course. -_-

Sparkle Harmonia

Hey, anon who asked if we could submit fanfiction chapters here. These are the highlights from the first chapter of a fanfiction by some person on fanfiction.net, starring herself, N, and an extremely OOC set of characters. There was sadly no real profile, so I hope this is acceptable. I tried to cut it down as much as I could, but it’s still really long. 

Hi, I’m Sparkle Armida Violet Galactia-Harmonia. As in, my dad is Cyrus and I’m married to N. This is my Umbreon Luna, and my many ribbons and trophies from my extensive contest career. Huh… you wanna know how I got this scar on my neck? Well, I guess I’d better start at the beginning. You might want to get comfortable because this is a very long story. It was a bright but chilly autumn day, in my fourth period science class…

So already this is…questionable. Cyrus doesn’t have a surname in canon, and if he did it probably wouldn’t be ‘Galactica’. Also, why the hell is her name so long? And why the fuck would Cyrus name his child ‘Sparkle’? She’s also married to N, and is some sort of brilliant coordinator, and from normal Earth. 

I hate to say it, but it only gets worse. 

Yes, I know my name isn’t REALLY Sparkle, but I’m trying to distance myself from society and normality. But they still lock me up here for my daily six hours of brainwashing, or education as they call it. I call it boring.

Okay, so it’s one of those, is it?

I can gossip with the best of them, and I got a ninety eight percent on a geometry test seventy percent of the class failed, but I honestly don’t care! My true colors are for few to see. Few meaning NO ONE!

I believe this paragraph speaks for itself.

At least I don’t go out drinking and driving. If society had more people like me, we wouldn’t be in debt; children would be taking advanced geometry in fourth grade, and would be working and contributing to society by thirteen. Not wasting our lives writing essays and living in whatever colorless box society dictates we fit into as teens.

No, if society had more people like you we’d be spending all our resources trying to build a portal to the pokémon world instead of, I dunno, something actually worthwhile. 

Also, psychiatrists would be in much, much higher demand.

I have the greatest mom ever and I HATE it. All I ask of her is acceptance of my fandom, and alone time for Fanfictions. What do I get? Popularity, expensive clothes, and everything a girl could want.

Wow. Just wow. Do you know how many people would kill for a mom like that? 

Also, acceptance of your fandom and time to write fanfictions can totally go together with your mom buying you stuff.

I’m combat boots (okay, everyone wears them, but I like them too.) black jeggings, purple tank tops and gray crop tops! Not slippers, yoga pants, 70$ jackets and a Starbucks cup. I don’t even LIKE coffee! If I need caffeine, coke cherry zero from a vending machine will suffice.

And…who’s putting who in a box now? Because it sounds to me like she’s stereotyping the entire teenage female population of America. Also, ‘coke cherry zero’?

"Yeah, just no ideas. The main character just fell off a cliff and is in a coma, while her boyfriend’s brother is secretly in cahoots with the evil dude and she is the only one who knows. Not sure whether to have her wake up first or have him kidnap his step-mother." Rachel giggles, "your stories don’t even sound like Fanfictions the way you describe them!

Yeah, they sound like some vague melodramatic plot you pulled out of your ass. Also, I’m pretty sure a dive off a cliff would do more than make you comatose.

The trail he takes is a simple one, down past my high-school, almost to my old middle school, and into the woods in between. Now I’ve never been in those particular woods. I have a good reason too. A forest between two schools? Drugs are a huge possibility. Yes I’m a goody-goody who fears everything

Apparently goody-goodies think of the educational system as brainwashing. This character is just so full of contradictions.

Cyrus sighs, running a hand through his hair, “Her name was… well her name was Sparkle. She was my only daughter, and people from this dimension took her as a baby. I don’t know why they wanted her, but she HAS to be alive. I’m not going to believe that she is… dead.” He chokes out the last word in a flurry of emotion like I’ve never seen from him. Who knew this guy had a soft side?

Cyrus, the dude who wanted to ELIMINATE ALL EMOTIONS, everyone.

She’s wearing skinny jeans and… combat boots.

Because taste in shoes indicates relation by blood.

I look up, and he’s holding colored contacts; his eyes are actually green.

…was there a point to that? Did she just want to prove that canon is hers to tear apart or something?

I see where I get my attitude. I’m surprised I didn’t see this coming.

If you see any similarities between your attitude and Cyrus’ then you probably need professional help.

His bright green eyes almost tear up, but he pulls himself together. I pull him into a hug, “I love you too dad.”

This is so OOC I can’t even…this isn’t Cyrus. At all.

"What are you doing here?" I ask. "Well miss conspiracy theory, what do you think?" 

How does this dude who just met her know everything about her? And when were conspiracy theories ever mentioned?

"I’m your half-brother. Dad cheated on my mom about fourteen years ago, the marriage still stands. Somehow you’ve always been his favorite."

If you’re wondering who this is, it’s fucking PAUL. That’s right, Paul from the anime. And he’s apparently Cyrus’ son. 

WHY?

"I can see why you feel that way. By the fact that you couldn’t even watch your Umbreon take a hit, you seem like the type." I bite my lip, "You say it like it’s a bad thing."

"it’s not, but it is. You’re very nice, and Luna already loves you. But, you fear battles. That could hinder you. If I were to suggest a career move, I’d say coordinator." I nod, "That’s actually what I was thinking!" Paul smiles a bit, "Well, you’ll be good at it. I saw your trick to make sure Charm hits every time, that’s really smart." But his eyes look distant, "Even so, you need to be careful, not everything in this world is how they portrayed it there."

This is Paul talking. So OOC that he’s unrecognizable, as is the standard with this suethor.

"Ash… he taught me so many things. It wouldn’t be a stretch to say I feel like I’m in the presence of a genius when he’s around. But don’t tell anyone!"

Paul, why are you so OOC? Why are you calling Ash a genius? You should be the last person to ever do that. Why, Paul? Why? 

Comashipping is canon, I knew it!

I’m not sure you know what ‘canon’ means. 

On that note, chapter one is done. As much as I’d like to read the other 14 chapters, I don’t think my brain cells can handle it.

Sorry for clogging up your inbox with this fanfic chapter, there was no real profile. If there was, I would have sent that.

 

Self Submission! I was super proud of this super cringy oc. 
Her Name was Kiara Uchiha and a lost, seperated sister/ relative of Sasuke??? She was orphaned as a baby and raised by a black dog until she was five. 
Kiara was perfect at art and found out about ninja school at some point, where she was a real emo gurl until she found her first friend.
That friend ended up being her girlfriend, and they lived in a shitty house together where the Akatsuki showed up and wanted Kiara to join because she had the Sharingan and also she could control blood and had some other superpowers. Oh, did I mention she was already Chuunin after a year or faster. So, her GF was against it so Kiara killed her and joined the Akatsuki. She was in a Team with Zetsu i guess. 


After that she fell in love with Deidara and they loved each other. She eventually got pregnant with his baby, they left the Akatsuki (how???) BUT the baby died inside her and she almost died of blood loss too. Way to go, she got really depressed afterwards so she had to go to therapy and her doctor raped her. (I was a sick kid)  THEN she got transferred to some psycho clinic where she had to spend 4 years but they let her out earlier bc she missed Deidara too much?? 

Also Deidara and her lived in some huge kickass Villa the whole time, and she practiced her bloodbending stuff secretly at night… i thin she could controll others when her blood was on them, and she could turn water into blood. makes a lot of sense, yeah. at least to 12 year old me it made sense…
and i remember there was some tragic story part about her and some white cat, the cat got bombed at some part. 

I used to fight about deidaras love with some other kids on deviantart, looking back i am ashamed 
BEST PART - my Deidara ship thing even got fanart! :’D so hilarious oh god 

I reviewed a terrible AoT OC. here she is.

Name: Cierra Ackerman Wait… you mean…
Maiden Name: Cierra Knightly
Meaning: Meaning ‘dark-haired’ from the Irish origins and ‘mountain range’ from the English origin. Alright, good start.
Nickname(s):Cici also known as the Blue Princess throughout the 104th trainee squad.
Alias (if any): N/A
Age: Female Titan Arc: 20
Gender: female
Species: Human
Birthday: Dec. 15th
Birthplace: Wall Maria.
Current Residence: Wall Rose/Sina
Sexual Orientation: straight
Marital Status: Married to who?
Language(s) spoken: English
Life-Long Dream: To see the ocean. (Heard it in a rumor.)
Goal(s): To survive life only, but learned an important lesson to die for comrades.
Affiliation: Scouting Legion
Former Affiliation: N/A
Grad. Rank: below the top 10.
Status: Alive
Like(s): Levi, Love, mother, drawing, reading. no..god please no…
Dislike(s): Insects and sour food.
Bad Habit(s): Being a bit selfish and rude, gets drunk.
Hobbies: Drawing, reading.
Fear(s): Losing her loved ones.
Personality: Cierra turns out to be shy and quiet because of her tormenting past. She was kicked around and abused by her family members due to running away countless of times from home because she did not want to get married. When things were serious, she’d do anything so survive. She’s strong and bold in the inside, but outside she seems weak and small. After the female Titan arc, she trys more to show her true self. Cierra also can be very rude. She sometimes may tend to make rude remarks if it has to be said. When she does, it’s quite a surprise to her comrades.

Favorites
(not necessary)-
Food(s): Burgers. (Any type.)
Color(s): Blue
Season(s): spring
Time of Day: Doesn’t mind~

Appearance-

Height: 5’0
Weight: 87. (Pounds.) that’s not a very healthy weight…
Hair style: Always down.
Hair Color: Dark Brown
Eye Color: Light brown. (I changed it XD)
Skin Tone: Fair
Body Shape/Build: Petite/ hint of hourglass figure.
Birth Marks: N/A
Scar(s): She has one on her left shoulder, across the stomach, and one across her right cheek and one on her forehead.

Health-
Memory (any issues with this?): No Issue.
Sight (do you need glasses?): No.
Mental (Any problems? Example: depression): No.
Physical (Do you take care of your body or harm it? Also include injuries): No. But did get broken ribs once. wat?
Sleep patterns (how you sleep and how much rest do you get?): Sleeps okay, unless on a mission.

Abilities/Statistics (1- lowly skilled, 10- highly skilled and tell why)-
3D Maneuvering Gear: 7/10 Cierra learned to use it properly by Levi and is able to use it well.
Intelligence: 8/10 Cierra is able to think clearly and make good reasons and plans.
Martial Arts: 6/10 Cierra has a small, light body so that come into a disadvantage of strength but advantage of moving and dodging quickly.
Battle Skill: 8/10 
Agility: 8/10 Because of her petite, light body. Also she is anorexic.
Strategy: 7/10
Teamwork: 9/10 she loves to do teamwork then work solo.
Passion: 8/20


Relationships-
Parent(s): Ami Knightly, Ronald Knightly
Sibling(s): 3 older brother’s. Deceased.
Other Relative(s): She has a few cousins, uncles, aunts she knows of but doesn’t know of their whereabouts.
Best Friend(s): Jean
Friend(s): Mikasa, Eren, Armin, Krista, Sasha, Hanji-san, Erwin.
Enemy(ies): N/A
Hero(es): Levi, Eren later on…
Rival(s): N/A

History/Life: Cierra was born into a high class family. She was born to Ami and Ronald Knightly. Somehow the children the couple got turned out to have a disease. WORK ON YOUR FUCKING GRAMMAR WOMAN. Because of this, they never got married. But then it was later on changed when Levi’s father killed Ronald’s brother when they got into a fight, Ronald made him pay back for he did by saying his baby boy, Levi, will marry the daughter born to the Knightly Family.nonononono NO! Levi’s father agreed to it, no matter how old Levi would be or the daughter born into the Knightly family. If she held a disease or not, they will get married. It was until Cierra began to grow, she learned from her parents she wasn’t to like any boy because her husband had been decided long ago. because of this, she escaped her home various times until her uncles had her locked up in the basement and abused her. Angst, man…

Levi was captured from his underground home and was forced to join the Scouting Legion. No… He remembered his father saying he’s supposed to marry the Knightly family’s daughter but Levi didn’t know who they were or where to find them and ignored the memory playing in his head. It was until he came back from a mission, some men grabbed him from the place we was currently staying in and took him to the Knightly family’s home basement for Levi to finally get married to Cierra. If he declined, both of them were to be killed. Levi’s opinion was on Cierra, if she wanted to marry or not. Cierra said she wanted to be anywhere but the place she was currently at and Levi agreed marrying her. After they got married, they both lived in separate places. (Levi stayed within Wall Maria while Cierra stayed in the ShiganShina district.) When the titans attacked, Cierra was able to escape easily while her mother was left behind, probably killed. When she arrived within Wall Rose, she asked everyone around for Levi. Levi found her, and had Hanji put in charge of her.

Cierra joined the 104th trainee’s squad and joined the survey corpse. She wanted to see the beauty of the outside world and the massive water land called the ‘ocean.’ She made friends and went on her first mission. (Female titan arc.) Cierra became a stronger person and was sure once in her lifetime she would be able to see the true beauty of the outside world.

Well… what can I say… THIS OC IS AWFUL. WHY WOULD SHE BE THIS FUCKING TERRIBLE? This is just…I don’t know anymore… ‘scuse me while I go jump out a window.

 

Penis. 8===D

Submitting a Mary Sue from the bowels of Quizilla in honor of Quizilla’s eventual closing

A Fallout 3 fanfic that was, unfortunately, never finished. The story is horribly formatted and a pain to read so I’ll only be including select quotes from it to spare your eyes. This Sue is unique in that she does absolutely fucking nothing in this entire fanfic. I repeat: nothing. Even the sex scene turns out to be all just a dream. The whole story is about how Harkness, once the badass security guard who is secretly an escaped android, is now an angsty teenager discovering boobs for the first time through lovely little lone wanderer Samantha.

Harkness sighed softly his eyes scanning the Capital Wasteland as he stood at the door into Rivet City a small part of him longed to see HER, she went by many names, “The Lone Wanderer”, “Miss Vault 101”, Messiah of the Wastes” but Harkness knew her as Samantha, the girl who had stolen his heart…or so he had thought until he knew he didn’t HAVE a heart…not a real one anyway…but whatever it was, real or not was hers.

In just the first sentence (yes that is just one sentence), we have someone going OOC for the sake of ~*drama*~. Harkness, for all intents and purposes, considers himself human. He breathes, he eats, he sleeps, he even bleeds. Should the Lone Wanderer choose to tell Harkness that he’s an android, and that he should stay in Rivet City, Harkness decides to live the rest of his life as a human and pretend that nothing has changed. He would not be thinking about his heart not being “real.”

…he smiled very slightly thinking about Samantha, she was so beautiful her long chocolate brown hair, her pale skin, her hazel eyes that always seemed to sparkle in the light, those full red lips….

Of course. Of fucking course. Even though this is a postapocalyptic wasteland, she still has to look perfect, sparkling eyes and all.

.what he would give just to taste those lips for the briefest moment…to kiss the sweet angel of the wasteland but he knew that someone like her deserved far more than him…an android… he wasn’t even human…The common wealth had always made him think it was impossible for him to fall in love and to be truthful even when he didn’t believe any of their other lies this one he did believe…after all how can someone who wasn’t born, didn’t have a real heart to give, would outlive any potential love…how then could they fall in love?

The whole point of Harkness’ character arc in canon is that an android CAN feel emotions! He understands the concepts of self-determination and freedom, so why would he angst about whether he can love?

Then he starts actually shedding tears over this, believing he’ll never be “human enough.”

Harkness frowned as he saw something in the distance as the person crossed the bridge a small smile flickered across his face and grew as he saw who it was, it was her Samantha, yes she was dirty, yes her hair clung to her face because of sweat but to him at that very moment she had never looked more beautiful he longed to pull her into his arms and hold her, never let her out of them and kiss her over and over again, yes he wanted more than just kisses android or not he was still a man but if a kiss was an unachievable dream why dare hope for more?

Shouldn’t she smell terrible, though?

He nodded slightly to her in greeting still unable to banish the smile from his face though the Merc Charmer outfit she was wearing made it harm for him to focus and android or not he had to focus solely on her face or else he may have ended up hard and that would have been an awkward moment for them both if she noticed THAT

His “human” identity is supposed to be 35 years old, and he’s acting like a pubescent boy over teh boobies.

And the Merc Charmer outfit is weak. Any Lone Wanderer who’s reached Rivet City should have the Reilly’s Rangers armor at the very least.

“Hello Samantha” she smiled brightly and nodded “Hey Harkness how is everything?” her eyes sparkling with happiness to see him or so he thought “things have been good…peaceful which is always good…no crime recently” she smiled and nodded “Oh ok…” she bit her lower lip and then stretched “I’m going to get something to eat see you later” she said walking off

And this is literally all she does in the entire story. Maybe if it was more than two chapters, we’d actually see why she’s so great, but that’s not the case. Some protagonist!

He then angsts about wanting to keep her safe.

The next chapter is a sex scene, so the rest of this post is NSFW. Put it under a Read More if you think it’s necessary.

Hot breath ghosted over his skin, under his hands he could feel smooth skin like silk and the occasional ridge of a scar…looking down he could see her under him, his angel, his Samantha.

Alright, I can excuse the smooth silky skin because this is just a dream, but what are the chances that the Suethor actually intends for her to look that way?

“take me Harkness” she whispered it breathlessly and needily raising her hips to meet his, he hesitated “Samantha…I’m not…I’m not human enough for you” she groans and kissed him passionately “I will decide that…take me…please…”

Terrible porn dialogue! We can never get enough of that.

Harkness groans her pleading undoing him in one swift movement he was deep inside her, buried to the hilt he groans his forehead against hers “my angel…” he whispered hoarsely…

OUCH. Poor little Mary Sue’s vagina!

she was so warm, so wet…so tight…he groaned at this moment he had never felt more complete…more alive…more human…

He never considered himself not alive. He even has a set of human memories, albeit, someone else’s.

at that exact moment Harkness’s alarm when off he groaned his eyes opening “Just a dream…” he mumbled softly his eyes darkening with his displeasure, he sighed running a hand through his hair of course it was just a dream…

If only it was for us.

Angel Iron Man OC

( I was looking at Marvel OCs on deviantArt when I found this gem. It’s nothing short of creepy. )

Name: Angel Starlin Bain
Alias: Dark Fighter
Age: 16
Profession: Student
Height: 174 cm
Weight: 49 kg
Gender: Female
Eyes: Brown
Hair: Brown
Particular signs: scar on his forehead caused by a battle 
Relationships: Tony Stark
Citizenship: Italian
Marital status: Single
Education: Hi-Tech Academy
Place of Birth: Venice, Italy
Place of Residence: Malibu, USA
Style: Rock or Gothic style
Curiosities: high knowledge at technology and robotics engineering 

Personality: Sarcastic, megalomaniac, smart, ironic, adventuros, hides her sentiments, lonely, silent, sincere

Biography

Angel is a young student and she was born in Venice (Italy).
Angel is stubborn and she doesn’t give up.
She likes technology, and loves Tony Stark.
She lived in Italy until the age of thirteen, then she moved to New York and after to Malibu.
While in New York, she met Justin Hammer, and she decided to work for Hammer.
Every night, she went to Stark Industries to steal secret information about Iron Man.
But, one night, she saw Tony Stark and fell in love with him.
With the information he had stolen, he decided to build an armor.
She returned to Hammer Industries and canceled all information, she moved to Malibu.
In Malibu, she made her armor, and she enrolled in a school: Hi-Tech Academy.
One day, Tony Stark went to Hi-Tech Academy for a robotic lesson, even though Angel was an expert in robotics, pretended not to know nothing for be helped by Tony. 
For a moment Tony saw her grades and realized that this was only an excuse, but he did not care.
Every day, Tony watched Angel, and over time Tony fell in love with her.
The last day of school, there was a party, Angel was sit when Tony arrived and asked her to dance.
She accepted. When the party was finished, Tony asked her to go to is home but she refused.
Tony managed to persuade her only a kiss. At Tony’s house, they laughed and talked until late at night, later, they slept together (they only slept, they didn’t do bad anything).
From that night, they began to go out together. 
One night, while Angel testing her armor, she saw that Iron Man was in trouble and decided to help him. Iron Man asked her name, but she started to run away, after a long chase she managed to escape.
From that night, all the world but especially Tony asks: Who is Dark Fighter???

Kirikateku Dragneel (FTOC)

OMG! Yes, I know this look like Natsu with purple hair and eyes, but this is how this Gary Sue creator design him. -_- Alright, let’s move on to the real topic. I found this guys profile on the owners profile and boy do I want to smack the owner of this Gary Sue, let’s dive in on this Gray Sue.

Name : Kirikateku Dragneel
Alias’ : Belphegor, Salamander

Okay, I don’t even know if his name is a real name, but I do know he can’t be a Dragneel since Natsu is the only Dragneel from getting the name from Igneel. Also, he can’t be called Salamander, that is Natsu’s name.

Age : 18
Gender : Male
Magic : Fire Dragon slayer, White Dragon Slayer, Shadow Dragon Slayer, Fire Devil Slayer, Fire God Slayer, Heavenly Body, Gravity, Memory Make, Re-quip (swords and other hand to hand weapons) Arc Of Time

Okay, age and sex is okay, I guess, but he can’t have that many different types of magic!!! One, he only gets one! -_- He can’t be a Fire Dragon Slayer because Natsu is the only one and if your character was one it would mess up Natsu as a canon. -_- He can’t have White Dragon Slayer because that is Sting’s and Sting killed the last known dragon of that type and again it would be like in Natsu’s case. -_- Shadow Dragon Slayer is Rogue’s and it goes on the same line for Stings. -_- Really, Fire Devil Slayer? No! There has only been one Devil Slayer in the series and that is Silver, so just stop. Fire God Slayer? No, just, no. Natsu kills the only know Fire God Slayer. -_- The rest he can’t have. You can only have one, uno, and etc out of all of these. Requip is logical, but none of the others. -reads more- F@#$, the Reequip makes no since, he’s either sword or gun. Nothing more on that. -_- -rubs my head from a pounding headache-

Guardians : Natsu Dragneel, Lucy Heartfilia

Guardians? What do you mean by this, if your many parents there is no way on this Earth they can be since he is 18!!! DX

Hair colour : Purple
Eye colour : Dark Purple, Blood Red (when in demon form)

I guess the hair color is fine, but how the living crap does he even have a demon form? -_- That isn’t listed in the unrealistic magic list you have. So your saying he has magic like Mirajane Struess too. -_-

Guild : Fairy Tail (Century Class Mage)

Is there even a Century Class Mage in the Fairy Tail series? If so this is the first I’ve heard of it.

Guild mark location : Left side of chest 
Likes : Kaira Lockheart, Fighting, Becoming stronger, My friends, My team
Dislikes : Transport, Getting soaked, Dark Guilds

I guess the Guild Mark Location is fine, but seriously? I can understand liking a person, but you likes after that are so over done and should be explained, not just thrown together. -_- Not every Dragon Slayer get’s Motion Sickness, so him disliking transport at a low level like he should be should bother him. Getting soak? Seriously, your copying Gray now. Dark Guilds seem like the only legit dislike, but again you should explain WHY!?!

Okay, I’m done, I know know how you guys that do this all the time can handle this bs.

I had an old Zelda OC who was named after me then later renamed Snow. She was of course in love with Link and was BFFs with Zelda. Anyway, when her story starts out, she’s pretty much a tag-along to Link through the events of Twilight Princess. When I wrote my fic, I literally would just play the game then copy down what was happening and add my OC’s actions in the situation.

Anyway, she was a pretty typical Sue. The light spirits gave her a crystal teardrop-shaped necklace that acts as the source of all her powers. It gives her angel wings and pretty much the powers of Starfire from Teen Titans. (i.e. she shot lasers or “magical beams” from her hands and eyes.) They also gave her a blue crystal recorder, as in the instrument. It pretty much acted as the Ocarina of Time but in the Twilight Princess universe. She also had a tragic past where her father was killed in a war and her mother went crazy and tried to kill her. I also implemented what I thought was character development by making her a super happy and energetic girl who craved adventure in the beginning of the series, and then a dark, tortured soul who regrets the life she’s lived by the end. When she and Link kill Ganondorf at the end of the Twilight princess arc, she gets the Triforce of Power for no reason whatsoever.

The next arc is her trying to remove a curse that Ganondorf put on her through her piece of the Triforce, and she’s ultimately forced to bring Ganondorf back to life to stop the curse. Cuz one life is worth bringing back the Lord of Evil. Then, in the final arc I pulled a plot point out of my ass where it turns out that she’s the princess of a realm called the Frost Kingdom and that her real name is Snow. Get it? Anyways, she has to go back to rule this kingdom and abandon her life in Hyrule after she just got married to Link. Her dad who turned out to be not dead and Link take her there only to discover that the Frost Kingdom is completely empty and that Snow’s the last of her kind, but she has to stay and rule there anyway. Doesn’t last long though, cuz she finds a way back to Hyrule and watches Link die a horrible death, so she sacrifices herself to bring him back only not really because she ends up still alive somehow, in the clutches of Dark Link who was a recurring villain. Of course everything ends happily ever after. Why wouldn’t it?