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We've all made them.
And they have some angsty terrible past.

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Found a Five Nights at Freddy’s sue! OH GOD WHERE DO I EVEN BEGIN

Since there’s quite a bit of info, I’ll just add my comments “Let’s Read” style as you go through the bio:

Finally, after procastinating for days, here she is. xD

My FC for 5 Nights At Freddy’s, Darilyn Deer.

Hope you like her!~ 

Anyone is allowed to draw her as long as you credit me. ^-^
Here’s her info, backstory and all that. 

Name: Darilyn Deer
Gender: Female
Species: Deer
Occupation: Animatronic Saxophone Player
Other: She wears a neon purple heart necklace, that has a crack down the middle and rusted at night as if she is brokenhearted or upset.

How poetically edgy, but for the most part, nothing to worry about

Story:
She was a Cajun animatronic character at the Six Flags in New Orleans, Louisiana. She’d play saxophone during the evening hours at the restaurant along with her partners, who are unknown at this time. They performed soft jazz and blues. After the hurricane, the amusement park was flooded and destroyed, along with her partners. She was left, abandoned in the backstage area of the restaurant. When employees and construction workers showed up to analyze the destruction of the park, they found her with significant water damage, tore ligaments and cords hanging out some areas. They were worried she wouldn’t work. Instead of throwing her out like the rest, they set her up for auction.

Wha??

If the employees don’t even know if she works anymore, why wasn’t she thrown away like the other animatronics, much less put up for auction? What person in their right mind would buy a broken down, possibly-not-working, heavily water damaged animatronic that would probably cost a fortune to repair?

She was purchased by the owner of Freddy Fazbear’s Pizzeria later that year, the owner assumed his current animatronics would welcome her and give her a home, though he had no plans of using her because she was in such bad condition. She was placed backstage so that during the night she could free roam with the others who could potentially help patch her up and show her around. After being there for a while, she developed a small crush on the main antagonist, Freddy Fazbear. It is currently unknown if a real relationship will form between the two. She made quick best friends with Bonnie the bunny. Chica and Foxy are merely friends, but do not hate her at all.

HE BOUGHT HER AND HE DIDN’T EVEN USE HER?? The fuck kind of shitty business decision is that? These animatronics are treated as what they are: MACHINES, and nothing more! They aren’t poor little orphans that need “a good home and love”, they’re tools to help progress and promote a business! And if this is around the time when the pizzeria is going broke, then this is a REALLY piss poor decision!

And of course everyone instantly loves her. And how would the pairing with Freddy even work anyway? NONE of the animatronics have shown any signs of caring or love, just murderous intent

Path: Backstage>Stage>Eating Area>Restrooms>East Hallway>Office

Her Attack Signs:

1. You can hear her hooves clopping against the against the floor in the distance. This means she is changing rooms.

2. If you hear scraping against the floor, it’s her claws. That means she is near in the eastern hallway.

3. If you hear distant saxophone music that suddenly distorts and glitches out, she’s on the stage.

4. When she’s near a camera on later nights, instead of her head twitching, she closely mimics Freddy’s creepy stare, but her ears move back and forth.

5. You can hear the cords that dangle outside her body spark every now and then, this means she’s at the door.

6. If you hear a slight taping nose, her jagged and torn hoof hands are tapping the hallway wall. She’s close to the office.

Way to copy Freddy’s attack path. A+ originality right there.

Why does she have so many tells? All of the animatronics have, at most, 2 tells that inform you that they’ve moved and even where they might be if you pay attention close enough. Is it to make her more “scary”? It only makes her predictable and easier to evade! Also, why is she moving? If the “Missing Children Incident” is anything to go by (which it IS because we literally have nothing else), then her being haunted as well breaks canon because there were only 5 children murdered and the murderer was already caught

Facts:

Due to her attraction for Freddy, she is often seen following him or his path, or when seen on camera and they’re in the same area, she is holding his hand.

Being from New Orleans, she is programmed to understand English and French.

Her inner machinery is rusted and some places is even cracked.

Her teeth aren’t sharp, nor human like, they resemble a real deer’s.

Being best friends with Bonnie, she usually appears right after Bonnie does on the left side. Which is unexpected since she follows Freddy’s path to the east hallway.

Very rarely, you can hear her voice some lyrics she made up, but only in the late night when you first arrive. It goes:

“You are not free, Ma Chérie, we will get you soon, at the time of the moon.”

Darilyn Deer and art belongs to me

5 Nights At Freddy’s belongs to Scott Cawthon

Great. She sings and holds hands with Freddy. So spooky.

UGH I’M DONE WITH THIS THING

Well, I haven’t played the game myself but I did see a few clips of some gameplays of it. (Didn’t watch the whole videos though, too freaky… >w`<; ) But I do like the fan art being made of the animatronics~ X3 So inspired, I decided to create a character of my own with my SAI magic. But instead of an animal, my character is a doll, which makes it more creepier…~ :plotting: Her name is ‘Baby-Doll.’
Full Name: ’Baby-Doll’ (Jade)


Alias: The Doll


Occupation: Animatronic Children’s Entertainer/Singer


Powers/Skills: Can quickly rotate her head 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise to view what’s behind her. Able to distract her victims with a disturbing melody to give fellow animatronics the chance to strike.


Hobby: Entertaining children/singing


BIO: ’Baby-Doll’ was once a normal human, a young adult named Jade who lived with her uncle. Despite losing her loving parents when she was fourteen, Jade had no trouble making friends. She first heard about Freddy Fazbear’s Pizza when reading an old article about the horrific event in 1987, when a customer was severely injured by one of the mascots. A week later, Jade was then invited to a friend’s child’s birthday party at the same place, finding it quite quaint but secretly creepy. 
One night however, a few of Jade’s closest friends decided to explore the restaurant after dark as a dare, and persuaded Jade to tag along. The dare backfired, unfortunately as they were all locked in and eventually, encountered by the animatronics during the late hours of the night. Witnessing her friends being brutally murdered one by one, Jade was the last to remain as she begged for mercy in song (mainly singing to calm her nerves. Singing was a hobby of Jade’s as well as baking) Intrigued by her sweet voice (especially Freddy) and sensing she had suffered enough, the animatronics offered Jade a deal - to become one of them. Work for them, and promise to remain at Freddy’s forever and her life will be spared. Jade hesitatingly agrees, giving her word and disappears with the antimatronics to ‘embrace’ her fate.
Jade was never found or seen again, along with the bodies of her friends. But the very next day, after their disappearance, there was a new addition the restaurant’s mascots - a petite animatronic doll with a frilly apron (a symbolization that she loved to cook and bake) which possesses a striking resemblance to the missing Jade. The name ‘Baby-Doll’ was given to her, due to her ‘charming’ appearance. The doll can be found on stage, singing with the other mascots or sometimes solo, which is very enchanting. How she came to be will never be known…and sometimes at night, an eery melody can be heard, drifting through the restaurant…a sharp head turning 180 degrees, both clockwise and anti-clockwise…grinning in the dark as a fatal distraction…~ :evillaugh:

If you don’t know who Akai is, she’s kinda like a milder, female version of Chris Chan. She made an FC X Canon paring called Sonai, and I will compare it to my own FC x Canon pairing, PikaLayton.
Layton stays in character. Sonic does not.
Pikachu isn’t a weak Mary Sue, but she can be powerful. Akai is a Victim Sue (the one that makes you feel bad foe them on purpose) and overpowered.
Most of my PikaLayton drawings are romantic, mostly kissing and holding hands. Sonai is just sexual things.
Layton likes Pikachu because she has helped him a lot, and because she can make him feel happy. “Sonic” merely likes Akai for her body.

if any of the Akai fans come here because you think I’m bullying her, think about what I’m saying. OC/FC x Canon is acceptable, but try to make sure the characters stay in character…

Akai does not belong to me.

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But,it’s not in character for Layton to fall for a pikachu.  It’s bestiality 

(Tigger warning: rape)

Found a NiGHTS sue. This thing is irritating.

So far, the suethor has a 10 chapter fanfic about her OC. But because it’s TEN chapters, I think that doing a Let’s Read of the whole thing would be too much. So instead, I decided that it would be better if I were to just describe to the best of my ability the sue’s backstory, with all information being taken from what I’ve read in the fic. I will also occasionally take snippets from said fic to aid in my description. This will be Part 1 of my description, so let’s get to it!

First thing’s first, I’ll start with the basics. The sue was originally a human named Dialla Ramsey. She’s apparently a 16 year old girl who is 5.2 and 107 lbs. (I was a little curious about those measurements. Correct me if I’m wrong, but based on what I’ve researched, this sue is seriously leaning towards being underweight!). However, the suethor just hand waves it as her being “small for her age”.

She also has the whole tragic backstory thing. Her mother cheated on her father and he left as a result. Surprise surprise, the father was also the stereotypical “good and kind parent” who believed in the sue’s crazy whimsical little fantasies about seeing NiGHTS related things in real life and he’s the only one who was ever kind to her and understood her and blah blah blah, you get the picture. The mother is the stereotypical “mean and evil parent”:

She ran a hand through her dark pink hair, wishing she had inherited her father’s royal blue. She had asked her mom into dying it that color but the woman wouldn’t have it.

"I don’t want to look at you and be reminded of him!" Her mother would say, then would always add with a bitter voice. "You act like him enough as it is."

To which Dialla would retort in her mind. ‘As apposed to being be a trollop like you, that can’t hold a relationship for more than a month? No thank you!’ But of course she would never says this out loud. She couldn’t stand to be slapped again. A punch was one thing but slaps just stung and were humiliating.

UUUGGHHH IT’S SO MELODRAMATIC JUST STOP

So the mother is neglectful, abusive, and brings home strange men. This is also another part of the sue’s tragic past, as the man that the sue’s mom is with in particular, Stan, is apparently a big creeper towards Dialla and attempts to rape her at one point. She gets away, locks herself in her room, tries to call the police, drops the phone, AND THEN PROCCEDS TO JUST SIT DOWN AND DRAW HER FIREND’S NiGHTS OC LIKE NOTHING HAPPENED. It never affects her, NOT ONCE, throughout the rest of the fucking story and it is never mentioned again.

The sue’s school life is also annoyingly cliché. She has two friends that are literally walking anime stereotypes, Polly (the “perky and kawaii bubbly girl who’s all about fashion and is rich!!”) and Kitty (the “rebel, goth girl who’s emotionless and tells off the stupid preps!!”). And of course, what sue sob story would be complete without the generic bully preps! :

"Yeah, Dialla, where’s the dumpster you dug that outfit out of." A nasally voice chimed in. Standing there in all her puffed up vanity was Gigi Windsor and her posy giggling like morons. One of the followers stepped forward and without warning, tugged at Dialla’s magenta locks with her hand. "Look at this! Such a bold color!" She cried.

Gigi sniffed and turned her nose up. “Cici, don’t touch garbage, who knows where its been.” She flipped her dyed blonde locks.

Cici let go like she had touched poo. “Eeeew! Now I like have to wash my hands!” she wined and her twin sister Mimi consoled her.

Gigi stepped up and glared down at Dialla, she had a few inches on the other girl. “It’s bad enough to exist when no one wants you, your daddy left for a reason. Get a clue.” She smirked as Dialla’s eyes got wide and started to water, but wasn’t counting on the girl she had picked on for so long to grow a backbone.

The pink haired girl bristled and shoved Gigi away from her as hard as she could, causing the bully to fall back on her butt. “Don’t you dare talk bad about my dad, you… you… whore!” Living alone with her mother gave Dialla the special slut-detector.

Gigi’s eyes flared and she got to her feet then swung her hand. Her manicured nails were out for blood.

YAY WAY TO SLUT SHAME WOMEN WHO DRESS GIRLY SUETHOR

Mini rant here, I can’t STAND it when suethors do this. It’s petty, it’s snobby, and it doesn’t make us like your OC any better. Get over yourself.

Ahem, ANYWAY, so it turns out that the sue and both her friends are all NiGHTS fangirls, particularly the sue herself (remember this fact):

"By the way," Polly decided to change the subject and take their minds off the unpleasantness of high school. "I finally got the last issue!" Polly cried excitedly, taking a comic book out of her pack and then shoving it in Dialla’s face. "Sorry, I’m just so psyched that I have the complete set!"

"S’okay. Let me see!" Dialla, grateful for the change of topics, took the thin paperback out of her squealing friend’s hands. "Oh my gosh! This is it! Nights into Dreams 6th issue!" she exclaimed flipping madly through the comic, squealing and blushing at every part that showed a picture of Nights.

Yeah. The sue’s “admiration” gets progressively creepier:

Dialla was staring out the window at the clouds, daydreaming. She took pride in her ability to daydream. Unlike her night dreams which haven’t changed and where she lacks control, she was in her element. Sometimes it became so intense that she couldn’t see anything even though her eyes were open, she would fly, run, jump; but her body stayed still in her seat.

In this particular moment she was daydreaming about NiGHTS of course and she was flying with him through the clouds, laughing and smiling at each other. Suddenly, the nightmaren was in front of her. His marble blue eyes sparkled with love and untold secrets. She smiled back. Their faces drew closer and closer, he closed his eyes and she did the same.

Their lips-

Tap.

Dialla’s eyes snapped open when something hit her temple and she looked down to see a tiny pink paper airplane on her desk. Stupid Polly.

Unwrapping the paper she read the sparklely blue ink. ‘Dreaming about a certain purple horned cutie?’ she glanced at the sender and gave a sheepish grin that made Polly giggle. The blonde went back to taking notes in her pink fuzzy notebook.

Unbeknown to Dialla, Kitty was staring at her from her desk behind her. The bluenette’s eyes narrowed and she forced herself to look back at her sketchbook, where love poems written to NiGHTS took the place of math notes.

And creepier:

She sighed looking at another picture on her desk; it was a picture of herself and Nights together. She was so pathetic. Not only was she a die hard fan of a game hardly anyone plays, she actually dreams of him coming for her and rescuing her from this place.

Why she put so much faith in this imaginary being was simply because she loved him. Correction, she was madly in love with the purple jester… head over heels, couldn’t stop thinking about him, in love. She loved his care-free personality, how no matter how dire everything got he could still bring her joy. She wished on countless stars for him to come alive and be her boyfriend… maybe more. Yet no matter how hard she wished, it never came true.

And creepier:

She slammed the door shut and locked all seven locks then dead-bolted the door, and then shoved her dresser in front of the door. Once the barricade was up, she dove under the bed and sobbed, her fingers shook as she tried to punch in 9-1-1, but she dropped the phone when her door knob rattled and Stan pounded on the door, screaming at her and calling her all kinds of things.

Dialla moved back further under the bed, squeezing her eyes shut and attempted to day dream him gone. She daydreamed that NiGHTS came through her window and flew her out to safety, whispering that it was going to be alright, chanting her name over and over.

This chick’s crazy!!! Seriously, there’s liking a character and then there’s flat out obsession! If it’s affecting her so much that it’s also affecting her life, I think it’s time for a major reality check!

Anyway, the sue falls asleep, ends up in Nightmare, and gets saved by Reala. He takes her to Wizeman where he turns her into the above pic: a half human, half Nightmaren replacement for NiGHTS (who they also never stop comparing her to by the way) named DAiZ (yeah, DAiZ, so original). When asked for an explanation as to why her of all people, we get this:

"You will replace the one who betrayed me."

NiGHTS. “B-but why me?

"I have my reasons. From now on, your name is DAiZ."

BECAUSE REASONS. The suethor’s explanation for DAiZ being chosen is literally BECAUSE REASONS. Keep in mind that this also is never brought up again or questioned, she just accepts it. This sue is not only crazy, she’s also an idiot.

After she blindly just accepts her new enslavement, she walks around with Reala and gets to know him (this is told instead of shown mind you). He is completely OOC and is polite and courteous to her and even tells her of his super-secret plan to overthrow Wizeman (whom he is completely loyal to in the games) at some point and take over for himself. He just tells her this, like it’s no big deal! Also, remember all of that obsessive fangirling over NiGHTS that she did? How she went on and on about how he’s her ideal boyfriend? COMPLETELY FORGOTTEN, she just moves on to Reala:

Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy! Creepy!

He’s kinda cute.

DAiZ shook her head, “Where did that come from?! Cute? He’s scary!

But a good scary. Her mind argued.

He gives me the creeps. She shot back.

Creeps? Or something more along the lines of nosebleeds? Her mind purred, if minds could even purr.

Gross… He looks like the lead mime from a circus slasher flick.

But a cute mime-

"Ahhh! SHUT UP!" She screamed.

Greeeaaaattt, a badly-written love triangle, that’s just what this story needs. The next three chapters after this is just useless filler dedicated to showing how happy the sue is now that’s she’s been kidnapped and becoming friends with practically all of the bosses in the entire game like they’re one big happy family or something. She’s also stated to be training throughout this period, which could be a great way to show her getting over a conflict that she is said to have at the beginning of her enslavement (she can’t fly), but it’s never gone into detail and is just once again told instead of shown. We never once see her make an attempt to try and fly, we’re just told that she’s been trying.

Whew! And that concludes Part 1 of my summary! I’ll get Part 2 uploaded once I’m done with it (Only one more chapter of horror left!).

Hope you enjoyed!

I found this while going through the anime RP tag.

I THOUGHT THE SASUKE’S SISTER FAD WAS OVER

|| HARATSUKI UCHIHA  ||  19  ||

Age: 19
Birthday: November 8th
Height: 5’5”
Weight: 55kg/121lbs
Eye colour: Dark purple
Hair colour: Black
Clothing: Black tank tops. But she has recently stopped
wearing them and now wears whatever is in fashion. She
likes to wear Kimono’s as a sign of tradition. Other than that,
she doesn’t wear anything specific.

Haratsuki was born a year later after Itachi. They grew up together and cherished every moment they shared. By now, she was a Jounin and his older brother was part of the anbu. 
She packed her things and headed there to not only take a long trip away from her clan just to learn more about the Land of The Moon that she fell in love with when she found out about it. But when she came back, she found her family have died. Bear in mind that she left when Sasuke was just born. 
She hid and watched Itachi confront Sasuke. Before she could find out what happened afterwards, she fled. 

Now, she lives in Getsugakure. Located in the Land of The Moon. 
Although she does take visits to Konohagakure and other villages as she
likes to travel.

✓Positive traits 
Protective, independent, calm, courteous, honest, hardworking, friendly, 
kind (once she gets to know you better)

✘Negative traits 
Self-pity, manipulative, jealous, quick-temper, tsundere, mysterious, pessimistic, sad (more often than not)

Abilities/Career:

Former Anbu who has been reassigned as a Jonin.

Mangekyo Sharingan: Only recently learnt. Because of this,
her eyes will often bleed as a side effect. (The design for
her Sharingan is under development.)

Great Fireball Technique: A technique that most if not all
of the Uchiha clan know how to do. Even just by observation.

Manipulating Windmill Triple Blades: Strings attached to Kunai.
Similar to the concept of puppet strings. Only one kunai is used
to cause damage and the other two as decoys.

Uchiha Flame Formation: Used as a barrier/defense technique. 


Dance of the Crescent Moon: Two clones are made as to confuse the
victim of which one to attack. 

Hazy Moon Night: Basic sword attack but puts the opponent into 
a daze afterwards. Although when she taught this, she did not know
it was already a technique - as she already learnt this herself - and 
thus called it “Swift Sword”. But her instructor tells her to name it it’s
original name.

Shurikenjutsu: The throwing of blades.

Haratsuki was taught how to use weaponry and the art of the involvement
of the moon in her jutsu. She has also been taught fire related abilities.
But more often than not, she’d taught herself other techniques and is known in the village she lives in as making up her own.

alright so…

recently, someone i watch on deviantART has been posting a comic involving canon characters, and her own OC, which is fine… except for the way she has her character.

to start off, this is a professor layton OC who’s name is wolf. yes. wolf. 

and of course, like all good sues, she has a thing going on with descole. she is apparently (because of this comic) now his ‘partner’ as in partner in crime. she was his apprentice, like luke is to the professor, but more of crime stuff.

you know what descole has? wolves. so why not name her wolf, because i dunno that makes perfect sense

anyway, she’s pretty annoying and her creator had her name as ‘erin’ something and also ‘alana’ and i am so confused on what her real name is.

also, before i actually get into my point about why she is a giant sue, i would also like to mention that the descole x wolf shipping is hinted at almost all the time, and wolf (like all the descole x oc sues) is only around 18-early 20s while descole (albeit he doesn’t look it) is early forties.

into what the problems.

in her most recent comic, wolf and descole and the butler (i think his name was raymond but i dont remember off the top of my head so i’ll just call him butler) are pretty like ‘let’s go after bronev’. the one character that everyone hated because HE HAS TOUCHED OUR PRECIOUS DESCOLE SO HE MUST PARISH

and of course, bronev is like ‘ayyyy’ and huge fight. wolf pretty much went ‘screw this’ and ran after bronev, and after descole and raymond move their slow asses to go get her, she’s been beat up by bronev. THIS is where the problems come in. (also would like to say, i would provide visuals but im posting this from my laptop which can’t really do much, but it’s actually decent art and it’s okay but the story went south.) bronev has a sword (he is not one of the only men in the series that uses a sword, by the way) and commence sword fight with descole, when bronev could have easier shot him and the butler, and wolf but no we must let them live. long story short, descole almost dies when wolf valiently sacrifices herself to save him and actually almost dies doing so

like this hasn’t happened plenty of times before with other sues

and then descoles pretty much going to try and avenge her death when, WHOOP-DE-DOO SHE’S NOT DEAD

WHO WOULD HAVE GUESSED IT

also would like to mention the fact that she got cut in the abdomen with a sword. a SWORD. and she lived through it.

so p much the butler’s like “shes alive” and they escape and a week later she wakes up and descole going in to see her and he was actually the reason she woke up bc of that one tear, and there’s the fact she’s not wearing a hospital gown because no, we must have bandaged boobs. hospitals gowns mean no fanservice. we can’t have that.

and she almost kisses him until the freaking butler shows up and thank god because too much pedophilia.

my question is

how did she live through all of this especially a freaking SWORD

WHY DID BRONEV NOT KILL THEM WHEN HE HAD THE CHANCE

WHY DOES WOLF NOT HAVE A ‘DRIP’ (idk what it’s actually called) OR HOSPITAL GOWN OR ANYTHING ACCURATE TO BEING IN A HOSPITAL

so many unanswered questions and so many comments like

"im so happy she lived" "why didnt descole kill bronev for wolf" and stuff

ugh

My First Mary Sue

Ok so, when I was about seven or eight, my brother and I were introduced to the LEGO Bionicle toys and comic, which was basically about the Toa, robots with elemental powers, saving the world. There was a lot of lore and mythology to it, and I loved it to pieces. Naturally, I wanted to insert myself into such a fantastic story and made up a character to do just that. I didn’t write anything down or draw anything about her, possibly because I was embarrassed of her even then, likely because that would be work and I was a lazy little rugrat, so I’m just saying what I can remember.

Her name was Ashleya (My name with an ‘a’ on the end - so clever!). She was a human kid in a world with absolutely no humans or humanlike creatures to be found - though in fairness, at the time I didn’t see any evidence that the island the story took place on just didn’t have any humans on it, but there were humans elsewhere. She traveled around with the Toa on their very dangerous missions, despite being a kid, and all of them openly loved and doted on her like an adorable little sister, even though some of them have trouble expressing anything other than deep dislike to anyone.

She was absurdly powerful. She could copy anyone’s powers by thinking of them, though the only time I specifically remember her using it is one time she failed at it and everyone got their asses kicked like in canon.

Her story was the main antagonists of the arc where I got into the story were holding her prisoner, and she got free when the Toa were fighting them. There was no explanation for how where she came from or how she got her powers.

Also she could surf on lava.

SnK OC - Ivan Schneider

Remember that atrocity Lena Schneider? Well this is her brother, and boy oh boy, it’s just as bad as the other one, if not worse. As usual, my comments are in bold.

Birthday
22nd July

Nationality
German-Russian

Personality
Humanity’s laziest. First procrastinator, couch potato and biggest baby in Scouting Legion. He hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him. Noisy and annoying, likes to be in centre of everything. Stupid pranks and rude comments are Ivan’s trademarks. On the other hand he is very charismatic and great at leading people; natural born commander. I’m calling bullshit, and let me tell you why. Because nobody is going to follow a lazy person into combat. Nobody. And no, you cannot just go from being the laziest, couch potato who procrastinates doing things he doesn’t want to do to being a charismatic, natural born commander. This doesn’t work. You said it yourself, he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, and in order to be a Commander you need to be mature and be able to show other people that you are worth following. Sorry, this just doesn’t work.
When working, Ivan likes to work with people - he hates being alone. Usually doing some physical trainings or other activities since he can’t stand “brain-thingies”. Who even wants to work with him when he’s rude and pulls pranks on people? Who even takes him seriously when he’s lazy and a big baby? Ivan can be also grumpy and sad, but it’s a really rare event for the man. Then why even put this in here when it’s a rare thing? You’re only supposed to put relevant information on the character sheet.

Okay, let me break this down for those of you folks who aren’t going to survive until the very end. He is Humanity’s Laziest, yet all his stats – except for his intelligence – are at 9s and 10s. This is Humanity’s Laziest. He also wants to be the next Commander of the Scouting Legion, yet the author states that “he hates working and doing anything that won’t result in any profit for him”. Tell me something, how is joining the Scouting Legion and becoming Commander going to profit you at all? It’s full of danger and hard work, all the things Ivan hates. And he’s the biggest baby in the Scouting Legion, correct? Why even go into the Scouting Legion if you don’t like hard work and are a big baby? Why not go into the Garrison?

 Background
Ivan is one of the Schneider twins - Lions from North - son of an aristocrat from King’s surroundings and a high priest. Both of them, alongside with their distant cousin, Dimitri, lived good and decent life behind Wall Sina, until a certain accident. When he was 7 years old he was abducted with his sister and cousin, as well as with other children from each Wall. They were held in some kind of underground laboratory. Cruel experiments and genetic changes, caused them a lot of painful memories and phobias. Except of course because your OCs are just so perfect they never ever experience these traumas. Let me tell you something: YOU ARE BEING OFFENSIVE TO LITERALLY EVERYBODY WITH PTSD. Especially since they were children who were subjected to cruel torture! They would not be okay! They would be mentally unsound and be unable to trust anybody! They’d be paranoid! They’d have issues dealing with their emotions! They’d have flashbacks and nightmares and phobias! You cannot get rid of PTSD in no time at all! Some people never get better! JUST STOP. After a year of searching his parents finally managed to rescue all of the children. In a year, you say. I doubt if this were a covert operation that their parents would be able to find them in a year. Some of them were already dead, in result of the experiments. Higher-ups covered up this accident, but it still remains in hearts of the rescued kids. The experiments were conducted by army to create a new type of titans, that could control others and wouldn’t kill people. They were named the Berserkers. Only a few of them were considered successful, beside them Ivan, whose operation codename was “Kérberos”. 
Unlike Lena, Ivan didn’t become so obsessed with revenge on those who conducted experiments. But he still wanted to punish them at any cost. Do you realize how much of a contradiction this is? He wasn’t obsessed with revenge, but he wanted to punish them at any cost. You are literally saying he is obsessed with revenge. After a few years of rehabilitation and peace, he decided to join the army with other Berserkers. They could reach the King’s surroundings through well passed exams and promotions, and kill anyone that was responsible for their tragedy. In the end, Ivan didn’t make it to Military Police and joined Scouting Legion instead. I’m just wondering how he didn’t make it into the Military Police when his stats are so high.
With his friends, he finally discovered the truth behind the experiments and as well as their goal - the Berserkers where just a half product. The goal was to create an ideal titan being, called now the Neo Berserker that was supposed to be used in coup d’etat and abolition of the King. Again, it is still never explained who these higher-ups were and why they were doing this. Do you realize that you are treating your readers as if they are stupid by assuming they will believe this? The higher-ups already have power, what reason do they have for trying to take down the monarchy and the powerful people in society? And besides if you read the manga (which I’m sure you haven’t) you’d know that the King is just a figurehead, and all of his decisions are influenced by aristocrats and the Wallists anyways. So they literally have no reason to try and take out the “higher-ups”.  Both Schneiders and other Berserkers decided, that they will do everything they can to stop that faceless organization from taking over the reign and then fulfil their personal revenge.

Now that the most recent chapter of the manga has come out, let me tell you a thing. Humans/titans are not turned into shifters by a serum. This should probably be amended in my previous critique. They are turned into shifters by eating a shifter. Therefore it is literally impossible for these scientists to turn these children into shifters.

 Reasons
The main reason Ivan joined the army is the same as his sister’s: to carry out revenge on the organization and higher-ups responsible for the experiments that ruined their lives. But after realising the real goal of creating Berserkers, he decided to protect the kingdom first. Joining Scouting Legion was not planned and made a few complications with the whole thing, but in the end they accepted it as a good thing – Ivan could keep a close eye on titans inside and outside the Walls and make reports about their unusual behavior at first hand.

Why did he even bother joining the Scouting Legion if he’s lazy and a big baby? Why does he wanna become Commander when being mature and having a strong personality are two traits that are absolutely necessary for becoming Commander? There is literally no benefit to being Commander. Have you read the manga? Do you see what Erwin Smith has to deal with all the time? I highly doubt a lazy, baby couch potato can handle what Erwin Smith has to.

 Goals
Ivan’s goals are simple. Taking revenge and protect his family from all evil. He strikes for the position of the next commander of Scouting Legion. He also jokes that he wants to be the next King.

You said Ivan is not as obsessed with revenge as his sister. Yet his main reason for joining the military is revenge, and the first thing you list in his goals is taking revenge. In the last sentence of his history you state he wants to “fulfill personal revenge”. Yeah, right, not as obsessed as his sister you say. Did you actually read what you wrote before you posted it online?

 Statistics
Intelligence - 4/10
Social Skill - 10/10
Vitality - 9/10
Speed - 10/10
Battle Skill - 9/10

While your entire personality is full of flaws, I still say he’s too overpowered. For somebody who’s super annoying and rude and likes to pull pranks, wouldn’t his social skill be lower? And if he’s lazy why are his battle skill and speed so high? He’d procrastinate doing any sort of work.

 Likes/Dislikes
Ivan loves to be the leader in everything, mint candies, flirting and fighting.
He dislikes being alone, working, liars and noisy people similar to him.

 Habits
Making jokes, sleeping, smoking cigarettes, eating candies.

Wow, so original. Having one sibling the exact opposite of the other. You do realize that siblings usually end up sharing some similar traits because they both come from the same two people, right? Unless Lena and Ivan are in no way blood related. But honestly, everybody does the whole “siblings who are opposites” thing. Why not go for something more original?

 Other
- His full name is “Ivan Octavian Caspar Schneider”. Why such a long name? It’s honestly so unnecessary.
- Ivan is a Berserker by name of ” Kérberos “. He was rejected as Neo Berserker because he cannot use his power when he wants (has problems in changing into titan form).
- He has two tattoos of lion’s head on his hands. This is such weak symbolism. A lion represents fierceness, bravery, and regality. Your character represents none of these traits. Try going for a potato instead. Unless of course you’re going for the fact that male lions are lazy and don’t do anything, then this symbolism is perfect for him. But you should probably explain that.
- Ivan uses a special type of blades for fighting, designed by his sister. I’m sorry, but you cannot do this. There are standard issued blades for a reason. If he doesn’t like following the rules then he shouldn’t be part of the military.
- He admires his mother greatly. When you add a trait to a character it should usually come with a “why”. I read the backstory and tried to see why he would admire his mother, but I don’t see any reason to. Unless this goes back to him being a “big baby” and he’s a momma’s boy.

 Overall

This is my lovely bby Hikari, She is the most uuber perfs OC that I’ve evar made~

She is a half human half chipmunk hybrid after becoming a mew mew and she is the best mew EVARRR!!!1!! She can use the mew aqua rod even without any because she is just totes perfect~

once she became the MOST POWERFIL MEW EVA she got bored and moved to the sea, whrer she discovered that she was the super secret 8th mermaid princess, and she rules all teh seas becasue she is sooo beauteeful and amazing!!Then, she decided to go to equestria and she became a super powerful alicorn and she rules there too and celectia and luna and evryone is totes in love with her (but she is super straight guyzz no yuri thnx)

Finally, she moved to the sonic world and married sonic and had 20 bootiful babies and they all went to different worlds and married the main protagonists.

the best OC I ever made.

S Wanted VTM Sues?

Name: Lilitu / Lilith
Generation: An Antediluvian of the 3rd Generation
Clan: Lasombra
Age: Born in the summer 627 B.C., Lilith is 2,640 years old currently, having been a vampire for 2,627 of those years
Sex: Female
Eyes: The “whites” are black w/green irises and thin, cat-like pupils
Skin: Pure white, like flawless porcelain
Height: 6’
Weight: Approx 180 lbs, well-toned, muscular yet curvy
Hair: Wildly curly and black w/ a blue shine when the light hits it, styled into an undercut 
Markings: 
-two parallel dots above the inner corner of each eyebrow (markings once used to identify her as Assyrian royalty), approximately 7mm each
-two black vertical stripes under the centers of each eye, about an inch long, tapering at the ends
-a large cross shaped scar on her chest where her heart used to be
-various scars on her thighs from where her sire fed before she was embraced
Abilities: 
-can create shadow Golems to do her biding
-can alter her appearance to be whatever suits her moods but has one set look she usually dons. 
-can travel through shadows
-can create shadow tentacles and gauntlets. Each gauntlet features 3-inch long claws that can cut through any material and substance depending upon the strength and force put behind the attack
-enhanced senses, speed, agility and strength
-can move across any surface a shadow can touch (ex:along a wall or ceiling.)
Weaknesses: None Found…for the time being…


Personality: Lilith is fairly insane, mostly due to her age and the vicious nature of her siring and mortal death. A true sadist and psychopath, she is fully aware she is insane and seemingly “rolls” with it. Dangerous, cunning and predatory, she enjoys the hunt. Taking the most pleasure in torturing and drawing out a kill (when possible), she especially enjoys despoiling young, sweet virgins in an act that mirrors her own mortal death. She prefers her solitude, the years leaving her to view humanity as nothing more than vermin, cattle.

Relationships: 
-Cerano del Toluca: An assassin of the Lasombra clan, an acquaintance and ally. 
-Irad “The Strong”: Through her studies at the Tombs she discovered she was sired by a childe directly under Caine. Irad, brother to Enoch and Zillah.
-Lucius Delacourte: A long time friend and trusted confidant of Lilith, a Cardinal in the Sabbat. They meet periodically for date nights and keep in touch often, appreciating the seemingly long dead art of letter writing over modern methods of communication. 
-Dr. Malthus Mordecai, M.D. : Her first and only childe and mate, sired in 2012. A serial killer hiding behind a medical/surgical degree who eagerly accepted the Embrace. He currently resides in the Tombs with her, under her guidance.

s: IM GOING TO PUKE THANK U ANON

the great oc purge continues

will sma and dena ever figure out where the fuck they’re coming from

will cas ever stop being gay

if a will could will wills how many wills could a will will

I’ve struck again

I really shouldn’t be so mean to people with OCs I’m sorry

But her reply was the best before she took off

Soooooo all the way back in 2008 I had a very brief stint in Batman Fandom. This is an OC I made to be paired with the Penguin. She was inexplicably British (not from a specific area or anything, just ~British~) and had metal wings in her back that unfolded. You could severely injure and incapacitate her by sticking a fork in her back.

She and Penguin became business partners who hated each other  but both liked birds and somehow ended up dating and having a kid named Peacock. As my OCs go she’s pretty inoffensive but still wowe self, wowe. Also I was going for ‘not traditionally pretty’ but didn’t have the drawing ability yet so the face is just kind of jenky.

I found this beautiful piece of work while on omegle 

Needless to say she disconnected shortly after my reply

Crappy Art + Crappy Character = This

Ugh...

God… this thing. Can you believe that this was my KH Heartless OC?.. from the Beast’s Castle world… >_> My old art is pretty bad. The main reason I posted this is because of my Old, Crappy art and how little he fits in the Kingdom Hearts Universe.